Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The diagram shows us the data of Little Chalfont Library by 2016. This tells us the data of children , and Adults for them library took loan in the year 2016. A large number of Adults visit library more regularly than others. A large percentage of loan were took for Children's fiction as 38% and Adult fiction as 38%. After that, 13% of loan were took for Adult non-fiction that enhance their knowledge. A small percentage of loan were took for other things such as: Children's non-fiction, children's DVDs, Young Adults, and audio books. They also gives us the graph of total number of loans that took from the period [redacted phone]. Initially, from 2007 to 2009 the amount of loan was loan than the other years. From 2010 to 2012 we can see level off. But in the year 2013, a small amount of decline can be shown. Gradually, an increase in the amount of loan could be seen. In 2016 the amount of loan were increased then recent years.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, such as the loan categories and the trend over time. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, you mention that 38% of loans were for fiction, but you do not explicitly compare the categories or highlight the most significant trends effectively. The overview is missing; a summary should clearly state the overall trend (e.g., the general increase in loans) rather than just listing data points. Additionally, the description of the trend from 2007-2016 is slightly inaccurate, as you describe a 'decline' in 2013 when the graph shows a fluctuation. More precise data reporting is needed to reach a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into two main sections, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and repetitive. Phrases like 'After that' and 'They also gives us' are used to link sentences, but they lack variety and sophistication. Paragraphing is present but could be improved by separating the overview from the specific details. The logical progression is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing, making the flow feel a bit disjointed. To improve, try using a wider range of linking words such as 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'subsequently' to connect ideas more fluidly.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'loan' and 'data' throughout the text. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'loan were took' (should be 'loans were taken') and 'the amount of loan was loan' (which is unclear). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning, it lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. You should aim to use more varied terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'witnessed', or 'accounted for', to demonstrate a wider lexical range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'the amount of loan were increased' (subject-verb agreement error) and 'They also gives us' (incorrect verb form). The passive voice is attempted but often constructed incorrectly, such as 'loan were took'. Punctuation is generally acceptable, but the sentence structure remains quite basic. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement and the correct formation of passive structures, which are essential for describing charts and graphs accurately.
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