Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The Chalfont library statistics are shown in the form of Pie Chart table and Bar graph.

The Pie chart is showing the age and number of library members in 2016.There were 22 children,15 were young adults with age range of 13-17 years, Adults with age range of 18-64 were 51.While adults with age of 65 and over were 12 in number. According this chart adult members were highest in number while the children members were lowest in number.

On the other hand there are statistics of loan by different categories in 2016.Children fiction accounts 38% being the highest in number. While the children's DVDs were lowest in the table accounts only 1%.

The Bar chart is showing the total number of loans from year [redacted phone].According to this chart highest number of loans were taken in 2016 which were more than 20000.While the lowest were in 2007 estimated around 15000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have identified the main features of the charts, such as the age distribution and the loan categories. However, the response lacks a clear overview, which is essential for a Band 6 or higher. You have listed data points without effectively synthesising the information or making meaningful comparisons between the three charts. For instance, you mention the highest and lowest values but do not explain the broader trends or relationships between the data sets. To improve, ensure you provide a summary paragraph that highlights the most significant trends across all three visuals rather than just describing them individually.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'According to this chart', 'While the...'). The transition between the pie chart and the bar graph is abrupt. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more fluidly, such as 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', or 'Regarding the trends over time'. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence to guide the reader through the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite repetitive. You frequently use basic verbs like 'showing' and 'accounts'. There is a lack of variety in how you describe data trends. For example, instead of saying 'highest in number', you could use 'the most significant proportion' or 'the dominant category'. Additionally, there are some minor errors in word choice, such as 'Pie Chart table', which is confusing. Expanding your range of synonyms for 'increase', 'decrease', and 'proportion' will help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. For example, 'According this chart' is missing a preposition, and there are issues with article usage (e.g., 'The Pie chart is showing...'). Some sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, such as 'Children fiction accounts 38% being the highest in number.' To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Ensure that your sentences are complete and grammatically sound by proofreading for small errors that can accumulate.

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