Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The given pie chart and bar graph illustrate that the information about the social library in an urban area is known as Little Chalfont.
Overall, there was a higher demand for libraries among young adults and less among older people. Also, the highest loan category was in children's fiction and adult fiction and the lowest in children's DVDs.
The lowest demand for libraries among elder people and young teens was around 15% and 12%, and the highest in juveniles and younger people was 22% and 51%, respectively, in 2016. In the year 2007, the total number of loans was around 16000 but slowly rose and reached 19000 in 2008. The loans were the same in the next year and slightly increased in 2010 to 21000. The amount remains unchanged in the next few years. There was a little decrease in 2013 at 19500 and again a rise in the next year. The highest number of loans were observed in the years 2015 and 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of both charts, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identify the highest and lowest categories, the comparison between the two charts is weak. For instance, you mention the age groups and loan types but do not effectively link these to the overall trends. The description of the bar chart is a chronological list of figures rather than a synthesis of the main trends. To improve, focus on grouping data points to highlight significant changes or plateaus, and ensure that the overview clearly captures the most striking differences or similarities between the datasets provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. Phrases like 'In the year 2007' and 'in the next few years' are used to transition between data points, but the logical flow between sentences could be smoother. The overview is placed at the beginning, which is good practice, but the connection between the two paragraphs is weak. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'demand', 'juveniles', and 'category'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'social library' instead of 'public library' and 'elder people' instead of 'elderly people'. The phrasing 'the information about the social library... is known as Little Chalfont' is awkward and imprecise. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding repetitive sentence structures. Expanding your vocabulary to include more varied ways of describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'peaked', would be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'the highest loan category was in children's fiction' (should be 'for') and 'the amount remains unchanged' (should be 'remained' to match the past tense context). Additionally, the opening sentence is grammatically clunky and does not accurately reflect the content of the charts. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. Focusing on consistent tense usage and subject-verb agreement will help improve your accuracy.
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