Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The chart illutrates the information about the little chalfont library, including the total number of loans between 2007 and 2016, the age of library members of 2016, and the total proportion of loans by category of 2016.
Overall, the total number of loans followed an upward trend. Despite minor fluctuation throughout the period. chiddren's finction was the most famous book in 2016, while adults 18-64 were the most of the member of library.
Looking at the data in more detail, the number of loans in 2007 was started from just above 15000 and it followed an upward trend until 2012 and in 2013 it experienced minor fluctron, after that it rose sharply. while adults 18-64 were the highest numbers of members in 2016. and the library had few members aged between 13-17 years only 13%. Children were higher than lower than young adults at 12 in 2012. However, the most famous book was fiction book among children at 38% and the least wanted book was audio books at 2%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all three charts provided, identifying key trends and data points. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention the upward trend in loans and the age demographics, the comparison between categories is disjointed. For example, the sentence 'Children were higher than lower than young adults at 12 in 2012' is confusing and lacks clarity. To reach a higher band, ensure that comparisons are logically linked to the data and avoid vague descriptions. You have successfully highlighted the main features, but the lack of precision in reporting some figures prevents a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into three paragraphs, which is appropriate for a report. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes misused. For instance, 'Despite minor fluctuation throughout the period. chiddren's finction...' uses a full stop where a comma is needed, breaking the flow. Additionally, the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt. While there is a logical progression from the general trend to specific details, the internal cohesion within sentences is often weak, making the text feel slightly disjointed in places.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision required for higher bands. You use repetitive phrasing such as 'most famous book' and 'highest numbers of members'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'illutrates', 'chiddren's', 'finction', and 'fluctron', which distract the reader. To improve, focus on using more academic collocations and ensure accurate spelling of key terms. The range of vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main message, but it does not demonstrate the flexibility or sophistication expected at higher levels.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, such as 'the number of loans in 2007 was started from' (passive/active confusion) and 'adults 18-64 were the most of the member of library'. Punctuation is also problematic, with several sentence fragments and incorrect capitalisation. While the meaning is generally clear, these persistent errors in basic sentence construction and verb tense usage limit the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and sentence boundaries will significantly improve your writing.
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