Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart and table illustrate the information about a public library in town called little chalfont and total loan taken by library in different category between 2006 and 2016
Overall, different aged people are members in this library and total number of loans were taken in different categories between 2007 and 2016.
The pie chart represents adults aged between 18 and 64 are more library members total of 51. and second highest members are children which total of 22, and there are 15 members which are adults aged 65 and over and least members of group young adults aged between 13 and 17 are total of 12. Total loans taken by labrary for purchasing different category books, where most of the money spend of childrens fiction which brings of total to 38% and less amount spend on childrens DVDs.
In the year of 2016, the more loan is taken over 20000 and least loan taken in the year 2007, which is total of slightly over to 15000. There is constant incerase in loan from 2007 to 2011. after that slight decline in 2013, after this there again constant growth.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identify the age groups and loan trends, the comparison between categories is underdeveloped. For instance, you mention 'childrens fiction' at 38% but fail to compare this effectively with other categories. The overview is present but lacks clarity, as it repeats information rather than highlighting the most significant trends. To improve, ensure you clearly distinguish between the static data (pie chart) and the dynamic data (line graph) and provide a more analytical summary of the key differences and trends observed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'and' and 'after that'. The transition between the description of the pie chart and the line graph is abrupt. Referencing is occasionally unclear, particularly when discussing the data points. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and phrases (e.g., 'consequently', 'in contrast', 'furthermore') to create a smoother flow between sentences and paragraphs.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several spelling errors, such as 'labrary' instead of 'library' and 'incerase' instead of 'increase'. The phrasing is often simplistic, relying on basic structures like 'total of' or 'more loan is taken'. To improve, you should incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'accounted for', 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable'. Expanding your range of collocations will help you convey information more professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include missing articles ('in town called little chalfont'), incorrect verb forms ('money spend of'), and awkward sentence construction ('there are 15 members which are adults'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of full stops in the middle of sentences. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Proofreading for basic sentence structure errors will significantly enhance the readability of your work.
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