Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given charts elucidate the information about a public library in a town named Little Chalfont between 2007 and 2016.
Overall, it can be clearly observed that the adults who are aged 18-64 are likely to visit the library children and adult fiction were more taken loans. Moreover, the total number of loans provided had increased significantly during the given period.
To begin with, the total number of loans given was about 16,000 in 2007 which had risen steadily to approximately to 21,000 in 2012 then showed a little decline by 2013. it can be noticed that the great number of library members were 51% who were aged between 18-64 and the less number was 12% who were adults aged 65 and over.
Additionally, the total loans by category which was provided in 2016, where children and adult fictions were 38% which was the highest among the whole categories, it was 38 times greater than children`s DVDs which was the lowest.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, including the trend in total loans and the breakdown by age and category. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the statement that children and adult fiction was '38 times greater' than children's DVDs is mathematically incorrect based on the provided data, which suggests a misunderstanding of the chart's proportions. While the main trends are identified, the comparison between categories lacks precision, and the overview is slightly disjointed. To reach a higher band, ensure that data points are interpreted accurately and that the overview provides a more cohesive summary of the most significant trends rather than just listing isolated figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'To begin with', and 'Additionally' are used to signal the progression of ideas. However, some transitions are mechanical, and the internal cohesion within sentences is occasionally weak, such as in the second paragraph where the transition between the trend and the age demographic is abrupt. Referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly in the final paragraph where the sentence structure becomes convoluted, making it difficult to track the relationship between the categories mentioned. Improving the flow between sentences would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks sophistication. You use basic terms like 'great number' and 'less number', which are not precise in a statistical context. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'children and adult fiction were more taken loans'. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of variety and precision in describing trends (e.g., using 'showed a little decline' instead of 'experienced a slight decrease') limits the score. To improve, focus on using more academic collocations and precise terminology for describing data trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'accounted for'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of information. Examples include 'the adults who are aged 18-64 are likely to visit the library children and adult fiction were more taken loans' (run-on/syntax error) and 'approximately to 21,000' (unnecessary preposition). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some missing commas and incorrect use of capitalization. While the meaning is usually understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and sentence boundary punctuation will significantly improve your accuracy.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.