Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart illustrates the information of getting loan from public library in town name Little Chalfont in a years from 2007 to 2016.
The chart tell us that the most loan was gotten in a year 2016 of 22000 and the least loan was 15500 in 2007 the chart shows that loan was increasing in next year expect 2012 and 2013 in these two years the loan amount decrease.
Starting from 2007 in that year loan amount is 15500, in 2008 amount is 18000, 19000 in 2009. Then amount is sudden increase more about 21000 in 2010, 21500 in 2011. Now in next two years loan amount is continuously decreasing in two concestive years 21000 in 2012 and 19000 in 2013. Then amount again increase by 2000 and reach at 2100 in 2014, increase again 22000 in 2015 and 23000 in 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified the main features and provided some comparisons, the analysis is somewhat mechanical. You successfully highlight the overall trend and specific data points, but the lack of sufficient length prevents a more thorough development of the data. To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive overview and expand on the comparisons between years to meet the length requirement and demonstrate a deeper understanding of the data trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite basic and repetitive (e.g., 'Then', 'Now', 'In that year'). The flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed, making the progression of ideas feel mechanical. To achieve a higher band, you should use a wider variety of linking words and transition phrases to connect your ideas more fluidly, such as 'subsequently', 'in contrast', or 'following this period'.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'loan' and 'amount'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'getting loan' instead of 'borrowing items' or 'library loans'. Some phrasing is unnatural, such as 'in a years from'. To improve, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'witnessed a decline', or 'remained stable'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you express the data more accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with articles ('in a year 2016'), subject-verb agreement ('the chart tell us'), and tense usage ('loan amount is 15500'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which occasionally hinders readability. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring consistent verb tenses when describing past data, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions.
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