Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The pie chart was illustrates the little Chalfont library and different different number of children age and total loans by category of the year 2016. And bar chart was illustrates the total number of loans on the year of 2007 to 2016 in number.
The pie chart was shows the age of library members or total loans by category and bar chart show the total number of loans in 2007 -2016.
The pie chat was provide the all our age of library members in that chart. The children 22 number of the library in 2016. At that time 12 and 15 number of adults or 65 over and young adults 13-17. So high number of 51 in the adults 16-64. And provide a total loans by category in high number of children fiction and adult fiction 38%. Or lower number of 1% in children DVDs.
The bar chart show the all our loans in number of different different years. So 2016 years is most number of loans in years 22000. And 16000 is lower number of loans in 2007.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task by describing the charts, but the information provided is often inaccurate or confusing. For example, the description of the pie chart data is unclear, and the figures cited (such as '22 number of the library') do not clearly relate to the percentages or categories shown in the prompt. While the main features are identified, the lack of clarity and the misinterpretation of the data prevent a full overview. The response fails to make meaningful comparisons between the categories or trends, which is a key requirement for Task 1. The summary is fragmented and lacks a clear, logical structure to present the data effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is organized into short, disjointed paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is not logical. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas, making the text feel repetitive and mechanical. For instance, the frequent use of 'The pie chart was...' and 'The bar chart show...' creates a repetitive structure that hinders flow. Referencing is often unclear, and the relationship between the sentences is not well-established. While the response is divided into paragraphs, the internal structure of these paragraphs is weak, and the overall arrangement of information does not facilitate a smooth reading experience.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms that are often used incorrectly. Phrases like 'different different number' and 'all our age' are non-standard and impede clarity. There is little attempt to use academic or topic-specific vocabulary related to data description (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'proportion'). The errors in word choice, such as using 'was illustrates' instead of 'illustrates', are frequent and demonstrate a lack of control over basic lexical items. The range is insufficient to convey the information with any degree of precision or sophistication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often distort meaning. There is a persistent misuse of verb tenses and auxiliary verbs, such as 'The pie chart was illustrates' and 'The bar chart show'. Sentence structures are simple and often incomplete or poorly constructed. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and there is a lack of complex sentence structures. While the meaning can occasionally be inferred, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar—such as subject-verb agreement and tense consistency—significantly impacts the readability of the text and indicates a very limited command of English grammar.
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