Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie and bar charts illustrate age of library members and total numbers of loans from 2007 to 2016. Even the table compares the percentage of loan on the basis of category at a public library in Little Chalfont.
Overall, it is observed that adults were more fond of visiting library while elderly group recorded the lowest number. In term of loan, a significant amount of money was invested on children's fiction and adult fictions books whereas, children's DVDs had the lowest margin. The highest amount of loan was taken in 2011 and 2016.
The pie chart shows, adults under the age of 18-64 were accounted for 51% of total population of library and followed by children at 22%. In contrast, young adults age of 13-17 and elderly people contributed around 15% and 12% respectively.
Further, it is observed that there was great fluctuations in term of loan taking the highest amount went above [redacted phone] in 2011 and 2016 while 15000 was considered as the lowest amount. In addition to this, the loan taking was divided in two groups children and adult books.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features of the charts, such as the age demographics and the trends in loan numbers. However, the response lacks precision in reporting data. For instance, you mention 'a significant amount of money was invested', but the charts refer to the number of loans, not financial investment. Furthermore, the description of the loan trends is somewhat vague; you mention '200000' and '15000', but these figures do not clearly align with the provided data points. To improve, ensure you accurately interpret the labels on the axes and provide specific data points to support your comparisons rather than generalising.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'In contrast', and 'Further', which assist in linking ideas. However, the logical progression is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, such as 'Even the table compares...', which is not a standard way to introduce information. The transition between the demographic data and the loan trends could be smoother. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of cohesive devices and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that flows logically from the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision required for a higher band. Phrases like 'more fond of visiting' and 'loan taking' are slightly unnatural in an academic context. There are also some errors in word choice, such as 'accounted for 51% of total population of library', where 'the' is missing, and 'great fluctuations' which is not fully supported by the data provided. To improve, focus on using more precise academic collocations and ensure you are using the correct terminology for data reporting, such as 'proportion', 'accounted for', or 'fluctuated'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'illustrate age of library members' (missing article), 'adults under the age of 18-64 were accounted for' (incorrect passive voice usage), and 'in term of loan' (should be 'in terms of'). While your meaning is generally understandable, these recurring errors in articles, prepositions, and verb forms prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and article usage to improve your accuracy.
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