Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
This charts illustrates the information about the public library in a town called Little Chalfont. in this library there are four categories in age of library members in 2016.
Overall, we will examine the table in which they wrote total loans category in 2016. Therefore in this table there are 7 categories. The Initial category children's fiction is the highest percentage in the table which is 38%. A well as children's non-fiction is about 6%. Furthermore children's DVDs is the lowest percentage which is 1%. Moreover the young adults is about 2%. While the Adult fiction is about 38%. In addition the Adult non fiction is 13%. Plus the Adult audio books is 2%.
However, the Pie Chart show the age of the library members in 2016. which is divided into 4 categories the highest category is adults category which is 18-64 and the percentage is 51%. As well as the lowest category is the adults 65 and over and the percentage is 12%. In addition the young adults 13-17 is 15%. While the Children is 22%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by summarizing both the table and the pie chart. However, the report lacks a clear overview of the main trends or significant differences. The information is presented as a list of data points rather than a cohesive summary. For example, the writer lists percentages for each category without synthesizing the data or making meaningful comparisons between the two charts. To improve, you should group related data and highlight the most striking features, such as the dominance of adult readers and the popularity of fiction, rather than simply transcribing the figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical and repetitive, such as starting multiple sentences with 'In addition' or 'Moreover'. Some sentences are fragmented, such as 'The Initial category children's fiction is the highest percentage in the table which is 38%.' The connection between ideas is often forced, and the transition between the table and the pie chart is abrupt. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that sentences flow logically from one to the next would significantly enhance the coherence of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. The writer relies heavily on basic terms like 'category', 'percentage', and 'highest/lowest'. There are some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'This charts illustrates' (should be 'This chart illustrates') and 'total loans category' (which is slightly awkward). The range of vocabulary is limited, and there is little attempt to use more sophisticated or academic language to describe data trends. Expanding your vocabulary to include synonyms for 'increase', 'decline', 'proportion', and 'segment' would help you achieve a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'This charts illustrates') and punctuation errors (e.g., starting sentences with lowercase letters or placing periods incorrectly). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, as most sentences are simple or repetitive in construction. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of errors in basic grammar and punctuation is noticeable. To improve, focus on mastering subject-verb agreement, correct capitalization, and integrating complex sentences using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to improve the flow and accuracy of your writing.
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