Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This chart illustrates the information about the public library in a town called Little Chalfont. in this library there are four categories in age of library members in 2016.

Overall, we will examine the table in which they wrote total loans category in 2016. Therefore in this table there are 7 categories. The Initial category children's fiction is the highest percentage in the table which is 38%. As well as children's non-fiction is about 6%. Furthermore children's DVDs is the lowest percentage which is 1%. Moreover the young adults is about 2%. While the Adult fiction is about 38%. In addition the Adult non fiction is 13%. Plus the Adult audio books is 2%.

However, the Pie Chart shows the age of the library members in 2016. Which is divided into 4 categories the highest category is adults category which is 18-64 and the percentage is 51%. As well as the lowest category is the adults 65 and over and the percentage is 12%. In addition the young adults 13-17 is 15%. While the Children is 22%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both charts, but the reporting is largely a list of data points rather than a synthesis of information. While you identify the highest and lowest categories, there is a lack of meaningful comparison between the data sets. For example, you mention the percentage of adult fiction and adult library members separately, but you do not attempt to connect these findings or highlight significant trends. To improve, focus on grouping related data and identifying key features that stand out, rather than simply listing every figure provided in the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical and repetitive. Phrases like 'In addition', 'Moreover', and 'While' are used at the start of almost every sentence, which makes the flow feel unnatural. Furthermore, some sentences are fragmented, such as 'Which is divided into 4 categories', which disrupts the logical progression of ideas. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that sentences are complete will help your writing flow more smoothly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'category' and 'percentage' to describe the data, which makes the writing feel monotonous. There is little attempt to use more sophisticated vocabulary or synonyms to describe trends or proportions. For instance, instead of repeating 'is about', you could use terms like 'accounts for', 'represents', or 'comprises'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate a wider range of vocabulary related to data description and avoid repeating the same sentence structures.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains several grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with sentence boundaries, such as starting sentences with 'Which is...' or 'In this library there are...'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences missing proper capitalisation or containing unnecessary full stops in the middle of thoughts. While the meaning is generally clear, the range of grammatical structures is quite basic, relying mostly on simple sentences. Focusing on combining simple sentences into more complex ones and correcting basic subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your score.

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