Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The chart illustrates about data of public library in a town know as little Chalfont.
Overall, the highest age group was adults 18-64 of library member in 2016. While the lowest group was adults 65 or above who worked as library members. largest loan taken by children's fiction and adult fiction group. Whereas total loans was taken from 2007 to 2016, the largest loan recorded in 2016 .
In detail, in 2016 the highest percentage of 51 % library member was adults ,with age group 18 to 64. Children were decreased to 22% of members in library, While it declined to 12 % of adults 65 and over age group. Young adults 13-17 were present 15% members.
In total loans was taken by children's fiction and adult fiction group 38%. while its half loan took by adult non-fiction group with 13%. Nearly its half percentage was taken by children's non-fiction group with 6%. While others like young adults and adult audio books give 2% loan and 1% to children' DVDs.
In line graph it shows the number of loans. It fluctuated from 2007 to 2016 . At first it cross above the 15,000 in 2007 . Later, 2008 and loan rate slightly increased . Then in 2010, loan rose to above 20,000 and in the next year stay constant . While in 2012 it reduced the loan and reach below 20,000 in 2013. Then loan rate climbed and reach to above 20,000 at 2016 .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all three charts provided, identifying key features such as the dominant age group (18-64) and the overall trend in loans. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a cohesive synthesis of the data. For instance, the description of the loan categories is fragmented and difficult to follow due to unclear phrasing (e.g., 'nearly its half percentage was taken by children's non-fiction'). While the main features are highlighted, the comparison between the categories could be more analytical rather than just listing percentages. The overview is present but could be more clearly integrated to provide a better summary of the trends.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader navigate the different charts. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'In detail' and 'In line graph' are used to transition, but the internal flow within paragraphs is frequently disrupted by awkward sentence structures and unclear referencing. The logical progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by the way data points are presented, making it difficult to follow the comparison between the different years and categories. More varied and precise linking words are needed to improve the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. There are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'total loans was taken' instead of 'total loans were recorded' and 'loan rate slightly increased'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and the student relies on repetitive phrasing. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of sophisticated or precise terminology (e.g., using 'fluctuated' correctly but failing to describe the specific nature of the changes) limits the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the reader's understanding. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'total loans was taken'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'at 2016' instead of 'in 2016'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement. While the student attempts to use complex sentences, these are often where the most significant errors occur, reducing the overall accuracy of the writing.
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