Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The charts illustrates different categories of information about public library in a town called Chalfont Library.
Overall, in the pie chart different age group members in 2016 are given. Children’s had saw a much growing in number at 51 than others , while young adults had little in numbers but higher than the adults 18-60. Moreover adults 65 and over are highe then both the young adults and the adults 18-64 but lower than the numbers of children's.
Although, the bar chart illustrates the total number of loans from the period 2007 to 2016. In 2007 almost 16,000 loan was taken and fluctuations over the entire period but grew higher and finished at around 22,000.
However, the table shows the categories in which tremendous amounts of loans were taken. Loan im Children’s fiction saw a steady rise at 38% which was higher than others, while loan in Children’s DVDs fallen and lower than other at 1%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers all three visual elements (pie chart, bar chart, and table). However, the reporting of data is often inaccurate or confusing. For instance, you state children represent '51' (presumably 51%) but then describe other categories in a way that makes the comparison difficult to follow. The description of the bar chart is vague, mentioning 'fluctuations' without specifying the key trends or the start/end points clearly. Furthermore, the table data is misinterpreted; you mention '38%' for children's fiction, but the connection to the overall data is weak. To improve, ensure you select the most significant features and present them with precise data points, avoiding vague descriptions.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused. For example, 'Although' is used incorrectly at the start of the third paragraph, and 'However' is used to introduce the table data, which does not logically contrast with the previous paragraph. The progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the different charts. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, logical focus will significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and contains several errors that occasionally impede clarity. Phrases like 'Children’s had saw a much growing' are grammatically and lexically incorrect. You rely on basic descriptors such as 'higher' and 'lower' repeatedly. There are also spelling errors, such as 'highe' instead of 'higher'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'experienced a significant increase', 'remained stable', or 'accounted for the largest proportion'. Focus on using more precise terminology for data reporting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the readability of the text. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The charts illustrates'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'Children’s had saw'), and missing articles or prepositions. Sentence structures are generally simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'loan im Children’s fiction saw a steady rise'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and using articles correctly. Proofreading for common errors like these will help improve your accuracy.
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