Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The charts below illustrates the information about the age of library members (2016), total loans by category (2016), total number of loans ([redacted phone]) in a public library located in a town called Little Chalfont.

Overall, it is seen that the age of half of the members are adults. Children's fiction and Adult fiction are the highest category for total loans. And the highest number of loan is in year 2016 and the lowest is in 2007.

First as we move to the age of the library members in year 2016, the highest percentage is of adults between 18-64 with 51% , then children are 22%, young adults with 15% and at last the lowest percentage is of adults of age 65 and over with 12%.

Moving to the total loans by category in year 2016, the highest percentage is of children's and adult fiction with 38%, then comes adult non-fiction with 13%, children's non-fiction with 6%, adult audio books and young adults with 2% and at the end children's DVDs with the lowest 1%.

Lastly the total number of loans ([redacted phone]), the lowest is seen in 2007 with approximately 15,500 loan, then it increases gradually but in year 2011 the loan is seen to be touching almost 21,000 and it decreases in between but comes to the highest in year 2016 with almost 23,000 laons.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all three charts provided in the prompt. You successfully identified the main features, such as the dominant age group (adults 18-64) and the peak loan years. However, the report lacks sufficient comparative analysis. For example, when discussing the loan categories, you list the percentages sequentially rather than grouping them to highlight the significant gap between fiction and non-fiction. Additionally, the overview is slightly mechanical; it would be better to synthesize the trends rather than just listing the highest and lowest points. To reach a higher band, ensure you make more direct comparisons between the data points rather than just reporting them individually.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific chart. The progression of ideas is generally easy to follow. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and mechanical, relying heavily on 'then comes', 'moving to', and 'lastly'. The transition between sentences could be smoother to improve the flow. While the paragraphing is appropriate, the internal cohesion within paragraphs could be more sophisticated to better link the data points together, rather than simply listing them one after another.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly. You use terms like 'gradually', 'percentage', and 'category' appropriately. However, there are some minor inaccuracies and repetitive phrasing. For instance, 'the highest number of loan is in year 2016' should be 'the highest number of loans was in 2016'. There is also a spelling error ('laons'). To improve, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for 'increase' or 'decrease' and ensure accurate word forms (e.g., pluralization). The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('The charts... illustrates' should be 'illustrate') and article usage ('the highest number of loan' should be 'the highest number of loans'). While you attempt some complex structures, they are occasionally marred by these slips. The sentence structure is generally clear, but the frequency of minor errors prevents a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and pluralization would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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