Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie charts illustrated the information about the number of individuals in the library in a village little chalfont.
Firstly begin with the children's who takes a loans in two category in 2016 which was children's fiction ,non-fiction and DVDs while the number of percentage was 38% , 6% and 1% respectively as well as the library member was 22. Moreover, secondly the young adults of a age group of 13-17 takes a 2 % by total loan and also the member of library was 15. Apart from this move forward to the adults 18-64 and 65 and over takes loans in three category which was adult fiction , non-fiction, and adult audio books was 38% , 13% and 2% in 2016 beyond this the member of library was 51 and 12 respectively. Furthermore in this pie chart the total number of loan takes in the year of [redacted phone] as well as 25000 was the biggest amount.
Overall, the pie chart gathering the information about the various age of various groups and these age groups are divided in four category.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the data provided in the charts, but the presentation is fragmented and lacks a clear overview of the main trends. While you mention specific percentages and member numbers, the connection between the data points is weak. The summary provided at the end is too vague and does not highlight the most significant features, such as the dominance of adult fiction or the disparity in library membership across age groups. To improve, focus on grouping the data logically rather than listing every figure, and ensure the overview clearly synthesises the main findings.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. The paragraphing is ineffective, as the entire body of the response is contained within one long, dense paragraph. While you use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Moreover', and 'Apart from this', they are often used mechanically and do not always create a logical flow between sentences. The progression of ideas is difficult to follow because the data is presented as a list of facts rather than a comparative analysis. Using clear paragraph breaks for different age groups or categories would significantly improve the readability and logical flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use the phrase 'takes a loan' or 'takes loans', which is not the most natural collocation for library statistics. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'the number of percentage', which is grammatically incorrect. You rely heavily on basic descriptors and struggle to use more precise terminology to describe the data (e.g., 'biggest amount' instead of 'highest proportion' or 'majority'). Expanding your range of reporting verbs and nouns related to statistics would help you achieve a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'children's who takes a loans'), incorrect article usage, and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'the young adults of a age group of 13-17 takes a 2 % by total loan'). The sentence structures are mostly simple or contain errors when attempting complexity. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of commas and apostrophes. Focusing on basic sentence construction and ensuring subject-verb agreement will be essential for improving your accuracy.
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