Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The presented pie chart depict the proportion of library members according to the different age in 2016. while the table data illustrates the information about total loan taken by various categories during the year 2016. However, the table data shows the number of total loans between 2007 and 2016. The data are given as percentages as well as in numbers.
Overall, it can be seen that in 2016 under the adults 18-64 category used the library a most and in the same years in the children's DVSs category took the least amount of loan. Whereas, the highest number of loan taken by citizens during the year 2016.
To begin with, In the year 2016 adults under 18-64 age group of category had a highest membership of the library. It was approximately 51. However, proportion of 12 and a15 accounted by the young adults 13-17 as well as adults 65 to over age respectively. While children took the membership of the library around 22.
Moreover, 38% of loans took under the children's fiction and adult fiction categories. However, Children's DVDs and adult audio books loan taking ratio was approximately 1% and 2% respectively.
Moving to the rest of the information, in 2016 around 24000 people took a loans from the library. It was the highest data noted in this year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, but the presentation is somewhat disjointed and lacks a clear, analytical focus. While you identify the age groups and loan categories, the description of the data is often confusing. For instance, the statement '12 and a15 accounted by the young adults' is unclear, and the connection between the pie chart and the table is not fully explored. To improve, ensure that you group data logically and provide accurate comparisons rather than just listing figures. The overview is present but lacks clarity, failing to highlight the most significant trends effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the flow between ideas is often mechanical or confusing. The use of cohesive devices like 'However' and 'Moreover' is frequent but sometimes misused, such as starting the first paragraph with 'However' when it is not contrasting with a previous point. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of information. To reach a higher band, focus on using transition words that accurately reflect the relationship between sentences and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'loan taking ratio' and 'used the library a most'. You rely on basic terminology and struggle with collocations related to data description. While you attempt to use specific terms like 'proportion' and 'categories', the lack of precision hinders the overall quality. Expanding your range of reporting verbs and noun phrases related to statistics would significantly improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('The presented pie chart depict'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or contain confusing syntax, such as 'adults 65 to over age respectively'. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often inaccurate, which can impede the reader's understanding. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like pluralisation and verb tense consistency.
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