Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The pie chart and table presents data about a public library and total loans categories in a region called Little Chalfont at 2016 however, the bar graph illustrate the total figures of loans from 2007 to 2016.
Overall, half quarter followed by adults in chart which contained highest portion from age group by rest. while, the least area accounted by 65+age members. In 2016, children's fiction and adult fiction had \represented
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely impacts the ability to address the task fully. You have failed to provide a complete summary of the data, as the response cuts off mid-sentence and lacks a comprehensive overview or detailed comparison of the provided charts. To improve, you must ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, including a clear overview of the main trends and specific data points from both the table and the bar graph. Currently, the response is too fragmented to meet the requirements for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text lacks logical progression and paragraphing. While you attempt to use cohesive devices like 'Overall' and 'while', the sentences are disjointed and the flow is interrupted by the incomplete nature of the writing. The referencing is unclear, particularly in the second paragraph where the description of the age groups is confusing and lacks proper structure. To improve, focus on organizing your response into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs that group related data logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and contains errors in word choice and collocation. For example, 'half quarter' is mathematically unclear, and 'accounted by' is used incorrectly. You also struggle with basic terminology related to data description, such as 'total loans categories'. To improve, practice using more precise vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'accounted for', 'represented', or 'the largest proportion'. Expanding your range of descriptive verbs and nouns will help you communicate the data more effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
There are frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, such as 'chart... presents' and 'graph illustrate'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing commas and incorrect capitalization. The sentence structures are basic and often incomplete, which makes the text difficult to follow. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and using correct tense forms when describing data. Proofreading for basic errors like missing articles and incorrect prepositions is essential.
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