Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie chart illustrates the age of library members while the table compares the total loans by category and the bar chart shows the total number of loans over a period 2007 to 2016.

Overall, the pie chart shows that Adults are the most significant while the table highlight that Children's fiction and Adult fiction both are excel in total loans by category in 2016. In bar chart, in 2012 and 2016 experienced a upward trend.

Regarding to the pie chart, Adults 18-64 represented to the largest age of library members at 51%. This was followed to this, Children was 22% while young adults and adult 65 plus were made up the smallest portions at 15% and 12% respectively.

Turning to the table, both Children's fiction and Adult fiction recorded to the highest number of loans at 38% in 2016. Children's DVDs represented to the lowest number of loans at 1%.

In bar graph, 2016 was the dominated year at 22,000 number of loans. 2007 was the lowest year at 16,000 number of loans.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all three charts and identifies key features, such as the dominant age group and the peak year for loans. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention the highest and lowest categories, you could improve by making more direct comparisons between the data sets. For instance, noting that the rise in total loans in 2016 correlates with the high popularity of fiction categories would add depth. The overview is present but lacks a clear synthesis of the trends, focusing more on listing individual data points rather than highlighting the broader picture of library usage in Little Chalfont.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific chart. There is a clear progression from the overview to the detailed body paragraphs. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly unnatural, such as 'Regarding to the pie chart' and 'In bar graph'. Additionally, some referencing is slightly awkward, such as 'This was followed to this'. While the structure is easy to follow, the transitions between sentences and paragraphs could be more sophisticated to improve the flow of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'represented', 'proportions', and 'categories'. However, there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation that hinder precision. For example, 'Adults are the most significant' is vague, and 'both are excel' is grammatically incorrect. You also use 'dominated' as an adjective ('2016 was the dominated year') when 'dominant' would be correct. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic collocations and ensure that word forms are used correctly in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Many sentences suffer from incorrect preposition usage or verb forms, such as 'represented to the largest age' and 'followed to this'. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'In bar chart' (missing 'the') and '22,000 number of loans' (which is redundant). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the information, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall fluency and accuracy of the writing.

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