Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie chart, the table, and the bar chart provided data about the public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Overall, the adults showed the highest participation in visiting the library, while the number of loans witnessed fluctuations, and the largest proportion of loans were in the adult fiction and the children's fiction categories.

Firstly, the adults had the highest participation with 51%, while the children category accounted for 22%. The young adults and the adults (65 and over) categories had contributed 12% and 15%, respectively. Secondly, for loans shares, adult fiction, and children's fiction, they stood at 38% each. Adult non-fiction and children's non-fiction classes accounted for 13% and 6%, respectively. Children's DVDs and young adult categories had proportions of 2% and 1%, respectively.

Additionally, total loans jumped from around 15000 in 2007 to about 18000 in 2008. In 2009, all loans remained unchanged and stayed about 18000. The total loans rose in 2010 and climbed to 21000, while in 2011 loans showed slight growth and stood around 21000. The loans witnessed a slight decline and stayed at 19800. The loans faced slight growth and moved to 21000 in 2014 as compared to around 22000 in 2015 and at the end of the period showed a figure of 22000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main features of all three charts. The overview is clear and highlights the key trends and proportions effectively. You have selected relevant data points to support your descriptions, such as the 51% participation rate for adults and the specific loan percentages. However, the description of the bar chart (total loans) is slightly repetitive and could be more concise. To reach a higher band, ensure that comparisons are made more explicitly between the different categories rather than just listing the figures. Overall, you have covered all parts of the task well.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Additionally' to guide the reader through the information. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different data sets. While the flow is generally good, some of the transitions between sentences in the final paragraph feel a bit mechanical. Improving the variety of linking phrases and ensuring that the progression of ideas feels more natural would enhance the coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly. Phrases like 'witnessed fluctuations', 'accounted for', and 'showed a figure of' are appropriate for an Academic Task 1 response. However, there is some repetition of basic verbs like 'stayed' and 'stood'. To improve, try to incorporate more varied synonyms for describing trends, such as 'remained stable', 'experienced a dip', or 'reached a peak'. The vocabulary is accurate and does not impede communication, but it lacks the sophistication required for a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. Most of your sentences are clear and error-free. There are minor issues with article usage and prepositional phrasing, such as 'the adults (65 and over) categories had contributed' (should be 'the 65 and over category contributed'). Additionally, some sentences in the final paragraph are slightly clunky, such as 'The loans faced slight growth and moved to 21000 in 2014 as compared to around 22000 in 2015'. Focusing on more precise control of complex sentence structures will help improve your score.

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