Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart illustrate the age of library members from Little Chalfont Library in year 2016. Adults from age 18 to 64 have most members covers the 51% of whole.
Children and young adults covers the 34% of members.where the adults over age 65 lies on 15% percent.
The table chart provide the data on the loan of children fiction and non-fiction is 44%. Adult fiction covers the most loan with 38% where children dvd's and young adult with only 3%.Adult non-fiction covers 13% and adult audio books only 2%.
The bar graph compares the number of the total number of loan taken from 2007 to 2016. year 2011 and 2015 have large number of loan taken which is more than 20,000. However,the loan amount in 2007 is only 15,000.loan in 2016 is also higher then 20,000. Rest all the years loan lies between 20,000 to 15,000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified the main features of the charts, the analysis is somewhat superficial. You have listed percentages and figures without consistently making meaningful comparisons or highlighting significant trends. For instance, in the bar graph section, you mention specific years but do not clearly synthesize the overall trend of library loans over the decade. To improve, ensure you provide a clear overview and group data logically to highlight relationships rather than just listing statistics. The under-length penalty is applied here.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the flow between sentences is often mechanical and lacks a variety of cohesive devices. For example, the transition between the pie chart and the table is abrupt. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, which makes the progression of ideas feel disjointed. Using linking words such as 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' would help connect your observations more fluidly. Additionally, ensure that referencing is clear; for instance, 'Rest all the years' is not standard academic phrasing and hinders the logical flow of your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. You use basic verbs like 'covers', 'provide', and 'lies on' repeatedly. There are also some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'table chart' (it is a table) and 'loan of children fiction' (should be 'loans of children's fiction'). To improve, try to incorporate more varied reporting verbs and precise terminology related to data description, such as 'account for', 'represent', 'fluctuate', or 'peak'. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic meaning but does not demonstrate a wide range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('The pie chart illustrate', 'Adults... covers'), missing articles ('in year 2016'), and incorrect punctuation (spacing issues after commas and periods). You rely almost exclusively on simple sentence structures. To achieve a higher band, you need to demonstrate control over a wider range of complex structures, such as relative clauses or passive voice constructions. Furthermore, ensure that you proofread for basic errors like 'higher then' (should be 'higher than') and capitalization at the start of sentences.
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