Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The various charts below provide data about a communal library located in a town called Little Chalfont.
Overall, the pie chart shows age of library members in 2016 in which adults accounted for a half of all members. The tabular data presents total loans of various categories in which children and adult fiction comprises at equal percentage, 38%. The bar chart presents total number of loans having highest value in the year 2016.
However, children contributes just under a quarter in library whereas young adults and adults above 65 are nearly equal 15 and 12% respectively. Moreover, leftover categories showing loans are all below 38% and stands on 13%, 6%, 2% and 1%.
In the bar chart, there is minimal fluctuation in the number of loans showing gradual rise from 2007 to 2011. After that, these numbers dip in 2013 and then become stable in the remaining years till 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all three charts, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identify the main features, such as the 50% adult membership and the 38% loan figures, the comparison between the data sets is limited. The description of the bar chart is quite brief and lacks a clear overview of the trends. To reach a higher band, you should ensure that the data is not just listed but synthesized to highlight significant relationships or contrasts between the age groups and the loan categories. The summary of the bar chart trends is accurate but could be more detailed regarding the specific values at the start and end points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices like 'Overall', 'However', and 'Moreover' to connect ideas. However, the transition between the second and third paragraphs is slightly abrupt, and the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical. The referencing is generally clear, but the flow could be improved by using more varied linking phrases to show the relationship between the different charts more effectively. The paragraphing is appropriate for the task, providing a clear structure for the introduction, body, and overview.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'communal library', 'fluctuation', and 'stable'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'leftover categories' (which is not ideal in this context) and 'stands on' (should be 'stand at'). The repetition of 'presents' and 'chart' limits the sophistication of the writing. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary to describe data trends, such as 'accounted for', 'constituted', or 'remained consistent'. The current range is sufficient to convey meaning but lacks the flexibility required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader, such as 'children contributes' (subject-verb agreement error) and 'accounted for a half' (article usage). Additionally, 'comprises at equal percentage' is grammatically awkward. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the information, they indicate a lack of control over more complex structures. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles will significantly improve the accuracy of your writing. The punctuation is generally correct throughout the text.
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