Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given pie chart illustrates about the age of people enrolled in a public library in 2016. the table shows the percentage of the loaners in a library in the same year, while the bar charts mentions the total number of loaners between 2007 and 2016.

Overall, 2016 was the highest number of loaners, whereas adults were the most who likes to loan the books. Moreover, children's fiction and adult fiction has more popularity among all.

To begin with pie chart, the age group of 18-64 was the most who were interested to visit a library in town and only 12% was adults 65 and over goes to the public library.

In a table, it mentioned that 38% books were loaned by category (2016) was children fiction and adult fiction. However, only 1% and 2% were taken by youngsters were Children DVD and young adults or adult audio books, respectively.

In bar chart, the thousands of loaners were interested since 2007. The number fluctuates from 16,000 to 21000 approximately over the period of time.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all three charts, but the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you identify the main features, such as the age group 18-64 and the popularity of fiction, the reporting of data is inconsistent. For instance, you mention '38% books were loaned' but do not clearly explain that this refers to the combined total of two categories. Furthermore, the description of the bar chart is vague; stating the number 'fluctuates' is inaccurate as the data shows a clear upward trend from 2007 to 2016. To improve, ensure you provide more precise comparisons and avoid over-generalising the data trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'To begin with pie chart' and 'In a table, it mentioned' are grammatically awkward and do not flow naturally. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear; for example, 'the most who were interested' is not a standard way to refer to a demographic group. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words would significantly enhance the logical flow between your sentences and paragraphs.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision required for a higher band. You rely on repetitive phrasing, such as 'loaners' and 'most who were interested'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'the bar charts mentions' (should be 'shows' or 'illustrates') and 'adults 65 and over goes' (subject-verb agreement error). To reach a higher band, try to use more specific terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'category', 'trend', and 'fluctuation', while ensuring they are used in the correct context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('adults 65 and over goes'), incorrect article usage ('the pie chart' vs 'a pie chart'), and awkward phrasing ('the most who likes to loan'). While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher level of accuracy. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be a beneficial next step.

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