Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided comparison illustrates the data about a public library in a town known as little Chalfont. Overall, different age of library members get loan in different years throughout the frame sheet .
At the beginning of the table graph, a moderate decrease in loan about 15,000 in 2007. moreover, significant increase in number of loans are shown in 2016 more than 20,000 by categorising this data total 51 percent adults ratio get loan with the age group of 18 to 64 regarding this only 38% adult fiction and 2 % for audio books remaining are non-fiction.
On contrast, adult 65 and over age get lowest amount of loan such as only 12 in figure . furthermore, Childs in 2016 divided in more than two categories. one is fiction and non-fiction their loan value is around about 44% by combining . and only 1% of DVDs from total amount that is almost 22 in numbers .
In conclusion , total loan amount is fluctuated through out the year from 2007 to 2016 .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the provided charts, but the information is presented in a confusing and often inaccurate manner. While you identify some figures, the connection between the data points (the trend over time versus the breakdown by category) is poorly integrated. You mention '15,000' and '20,000' without clearly stating what these figures represent, and the interpretation of the percentages is disjointed. To improve, you must clearly distinguish between the overall trend (the line graph) and the specific category breakdowns (the pie charts). Ensure that your data selection is accurate and that you provide a clear overview of the main features rather than listing isolated, confusing statistics.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'On contrast' (should be 'In contrast') and 'moreover' used to start a sentence without a clear preceding logical link. Referencing is frequently unclear; for example, it is difficult to follow what 'this data' refers to in the second paragraph. The conclusion is very brief and does not effectively summarise the main trends. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the flow of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'get loan' and 'amount', which are not the most precise collocations for describing library data. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'frame sheet' (likely meaning 'time frame') and 'table graph' (the image is a line graph and pie charts). Some phrasing is awkward, such as '12 in figure' and '22 in numbers'. To reach a higher band, you should use more academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'accounted for', 'proportion', and 'category'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('different age of library members get loan'), incorrect article usage, and fragmented sentence structures. The sentence 'Childs in 2016 divided in more than two categories' is grammatically incomplete. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and pay closer attention to pluralisation and the correct use of prepositions.
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