Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The pie chart provides information regarding the proportion of library members according to their age in 2016, whereas the table and bar graph compare the percentage of loans by seven categories in 2016 and the total number of loan from 2007 to 2016.
Overall, the majority of library members are adults from age 18 to 64 and elderly people were less interested in library membership in 2016. The bulk percentage of loans were on children's fiction and adult fiction, and children's DVDs was the lowest share of loan, while the number of loans increase the year 2007 forward and fluctuated.
Firstly, with regard to pie chart, in 2016 more than half of library members were from the age group between 18 and 64, representing 51%. By comparison, only 12% of elderly people held the membership of library. When it comes to children, they accounted for 22% of total membership, followed by the percentage of teenagers, at 15%.
In terms of table, children's fiction and adult fiction allocated 38% of total loans. In contrast, only 1% loan taken for children's DVD, and 2% for both young adults and adult audio books. According to provided data on the bar graph, in the year 2007, the number of loans stood at slightly higher than 15,000, this number experienced growth over the given period. By 2016, the number loans peaked at approximately 22,000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The response effectively covers all three visual components provided. You have successfully identified the main features, such as the dominance of the 18-64 age group and the upward trend in loan numbers. Comparisons are made throughout, such as contrasting the high percentage of fiction loans with the low figures for DVDs. However, the analysis could be improved by being more precise with data; for instance, stating 'the number of loans increase the year 2007 forward and fluctuated' is slightly inaccurate as the trend is generally upward with only minor variations. Overall, the report is well-structured and addresses the requirements of the task clearly.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The response is logically organized with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices effectively, such as 'By comparison', 'In contrast', and 'When it comes to'. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different data sets. While the flow is generally smooth, some transitions could be more sophisticated to avoid a slightly mechanical feel. For example, the transition between the table and the bar graph could be more integrated. Nevertheless, the progression of ideas is clear throughout the text, and referencing is consistent.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey information clearly. Phrases like 'proportion of library members', 'allocated 38% of total loans', and 'experienced growth' are used appropriately. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'bulk percentage' (which is non-standard) and 'the number loans' (missing a preposition). Despite these occasional inaccuracies, the vocabulary is adequate for the task and allows for precise reporting of the data. To reach a higher band, focus on more natural collocations and varied reporting verbs.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical slips, such as 'the number of loan' (should be plural 'loans'), 'the year 2007 forward' (awkward phrasing), and 'only 1% loan taken' (missing auxiliary verb 'was'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede communication. The sentence structure is generally sound, and punctuation is used correctly. To improve, ensure consistent subject-verb agreement and pay closer attention to articles and prepositions, which are currently the most frequent sources of error.
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