Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-06
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given pie chart illustrate the information about the library mumbers of distinct age groups regarding seven loan categories in 2016 of a public library in a town named as Little Chalfont. Moreover table provide the data about overall number of loans within the period of [redacted phone].
Overall, it can be clearly seen that adults experienced the most significant share of the totall members of library. Whereas maximum loan occupied for children's fiction and adult fiction is 38% for each in 2016. On the other hand, maximum loan numbers in 2016 was approximately 22,000.
In 2016, adults with the 18-64 ages groups represented the largest proportion of library members accounted for 51%. This was followed by the 22% shares for children with the highest loan in 2016 by both adults and childrens with the 38% of loan for chlidren's and adult fiction books respectively. In contrast, children DVDs have the lowest loan of 1%. Second highest loans respresented for adult non-fiction with 13%. However, the totall number of loan's prices fluctuated during the 10 year period. In 2007, minimum 16000 loan was assigned then its prices gradually soar in tge following years and in 2011 it was 21000. Conversaly, the prices of loans slighly declined upto 19,000 but climb to its highest value of 22,000 in 2016
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
You have successfully identified the main features of the charts, including the age group distribution and the loan trends over time. However, the response contains some inaccuracies in data interpretation. For example, you state that 'maximum loan occupied for children's fiction and adult fiction is 38% for each', whereas the chart shows 38% for children's fiction and 38% for adult fiction, but these are separate categories. Additionally, you refer to 'loan's prices', which is a misinterpretation of the data, as the chart tracks the number of loans, not the cost. While you cover the requirements, the analysis is slightly hampered by these misinterpretations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Overall', 'In contrast', and 'Conversaly' (spelled incorrectly). However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the transition between the age groups and the loan numbers feels abrupt. The logical progression is generally maintained, but the use of cohesive devices could be more sophisticated and accurate to improve the overall flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'fluctuated', and 'represented'. However, there are several instances of word choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'loan's prices' instead of 'number of loans' and 'soar' used as a past tense verb incorrectly. Spelling errors like 'mumbers', 'totall', 'chlidren's', and 'Conversaly' also occur. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main points, the errors in word choice and spelling prevent a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'The given pie chart illustrate' (subject-verb agreement), 'adults with the 18-64 ages groups' (incorrect pluralisation), and 'minimum 16000 loan was assigned' (missing article). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of apostrophes in 'loan's' and 'childrens'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable and affect the clarity of your writing.
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