Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The illustration shows information about the library in the small town. Overall, the members of the library were adults more than half of the total, and the debt on the organization increased every year, but most of loans on children fiction category and least number of loans was children DVD.

It is quite evident from the chart that, among the Little Chalfont Library member age groups, the largest number of people who have membership was adults between 18 and 64, and the number of children was the second largest, but the least people of group was adults above 65 years.

Furthermore, the total number of loans on the library from 2007 to 2016 is explained, in 2007 the total debt of loan was around fifteen thousands, while with the passage of time the numbers in loan was increased above twenty thousands, in 2013, debt was slightly decreased below nineteen thousands, but at the end in 2016, the loan of the library reached the highest level.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main features of the charts, including membership demographics and loan trends. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, while you mention the 'largest number' of members, you do not provide specific data points to support these comparisons. Furthermore, there is a significant misunderstanding of the data: you refer to the 'total debt of loan,' whereas the chart clearly displays the 'total number of loans.' This misinterpretation of the data labels impacts the accuracy of your report. To reach a higher band, ensure you accurately interpret the labels and include specific figures to substantiate your observations.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into three paragraphs, which is appropriate for this task. There is a basic logical progression from the introduction to the body paragraphs. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as 'Furthermore, the total number of loans on the library from 2007 to 2016 is explained.' The referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect ideas more naturally rather than relying on simple transitions.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. You rely on repetitive phrasing, such as 'number of' and 'loans.' The misuse of the word 'debt' instead of 'loans' is a notable lexical error that affects the clarity of the report. There is little attempt to use less common or more sophisticated vocabulary related to data description (e.g., 'fluctuated,' 'peaked,' 'accounted for'). To improve, focus on using precise terminology relevant to describing charts and graphs.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include 'the least people of group was adults' (incorrect phrasing) and 'the loan of the library reached the highest level' (missing article/preposition). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and comma splices, such as in the first paragraph. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to lower the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct sentence boundaries will help improve your accuracy.

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