Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
According to the chart the information about public library in a town is called little Chalfont .
There are 4 age member of library thats is children, adults, young adult.
Children are mostly under age of 8, young adults are the age group of 13 to 18 and adults are the age group of 18-64 and above 65 .
Children mostly taken children’s friction book which is 38% and non fiction books are 6 % and children’s DVD are 1%. Young adult acquired adult fiction books 38% and non fiction books 13% and adult audio books 2% .
In 2007 the number of loans is 15000. In 2008 its increase to 19000. In 2009 the loan remain same as 2008. In 2010 its rapidly increase to
21000. In 2011 its slightly increase to 22000. In 2012 its drops to 21000 . In 2013 its drop to 19500. In 2014 its again increase to 21000 . In 2015 its slight increase 22000 and in 2016 its again increase to 22000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the charts, but the presentation is somewhat mechanical. You have identified the age groups and the loan trends, but the analysis lacks a clear overview or a summary of the most significant trends. For example, you list the loan numbers year by year rather than grouping them to highlight the overall upward trend or the fluctuations. Additionally, the description of the age groups is slightly inaccurate, as you mention four groups but only list three. To improve, ensure you provide a clear 'overview' paragraph that highlights the main trends, such as the general increase in library loans over the period, rather than just listing data points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is very limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures and repetitive phrasing like 'In 2007...', 'In 2008...', and 'In 2009...'. There is a lack of linking words to connect ideas or show relationships between the data points. To improve, try using a wider range of cohesive devices such as 'subsequently', 'in contrast', 'meanwhile', or 'following this period' to create a smoother flow between your sentences and paragraphs.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'increase' and 'drop' to describe the data, and there are some errors in word choice, such as 'friction book' instead of 'fiction book' and 'acquired' when referring to book loans. The range of vocabulary is limited to the information provided in the prompt. To achieve a higher band, you should incorporate a more varied range of synonyms for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'peaked', or 'experienced a decline', and ensure you use precise terminology related to library services.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the number of loans is 15000'), incorrect verb tenses (e.g., 'the loan remain same'), and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'there are 4 age member of library'). The sentence structures are mostly simple, with very few attempts at complex sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses for past events and ensuring that subjects and verbs agree. Practicing the use of complex sentences with relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions will also help improve your range.
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