Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph which is mentioned above is divided in two factors which are loans and age of the members.
The members of library are of various ages from children's to young adults and adults. Also there are the percentages which explain how much loan was acquired by each age group during year 2007 to 2016.
There are high number of adults in library members. Also the second highest members pf library are children and further on then we have young adults and adults those are 65 and over.
However the loan categories explain the percentages of these age groups. When we see the data the lowest number of loans were recorded in 2007. On the other hand highest number of loans were recorded in 2016. Although during these years it is been seen that the number of loans grows gradually. Also lowest category of loans category are children dvds and adult audio book and young adults.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to adequately address the task. While it mentions the two charts, it does not provide a clear overview or accurately report the main features. The description of the data is vague and contains inaccuracies, such as the claim that 'the lowest number of loans were recorded in 2007' and 'highest in 2016', which is not supported by the provided visual data. Furthermore, the response lacks a clear comparison between the age groups and the loan categories. Key trends are not identified, and the information provided is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to understand the actual data presented in the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into short paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas effectively. Phrases like 'Also there are' and 'further on then we have' are used in a mechanical and repetitive way, which hinders the flow of the text. The referencing is often unclear, particularly when discussing the loan categories, making it difficult to follow the writer's train of thought. The overall structure feels disjointed rather than a cohesive summary of the provided information.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The writer relies on basic terms such as 'factors', 'members', and 'loans' throughout the text. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices, such as 'divided in two factors' instead of 'divided into two categories' and 'loan was acquired' instead of 'number of loans'. The lack of variety in vocabulary and the inability to use precise terminology to describe the data significantly limit the quality of the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with article usage ('in library members'), subject-verb agreement ('the lowest category of loans category are children'), and sentence structure ('The graph which is mentioned above is divided in two factors'). While some simple sentences are clear, the attempt at more complex structures often results in errors. Punctuation is generally functional, but the overall control of grammar is inconsistent, which prevents the response from reaching a higher band.
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