Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The charts illustrate the information about a public library in a town called little Chalfont.
Different age groups people take parts in little Chalfont library in 2016.
Children, young adults 13-17, adults 18-64, adults 65 and over, Overall, these are the people who take loan and there are dividing into different categories.
children fiction gains 38% loan which are higher value in each group if we see towards the total number of loans in 2007 to 2016 people gain more than 20000 thousand loans in 2016.
In addition, children's non-fiction category is 6% and furthermore children's DVDs category is 1%, if we go towards young adults' category then it 2 %, adult fiction 38 %, adult non fiction 13% and adult audio books category is 2%.
on the other hand, in 2007 number of loans gain by people is 15000, in 2008 loan gain more than 15000 people, in 2009 loan gain by people near 19000 thousand, in 2010 loan gain by people 20000 thousand, in 2011, loan gain by people 21000 thousand, in 2012 gradually decrease by people in gaining loan near 18000 thousand and in 2013 same as 2012 and in 2015 gradually increases in gaining loan .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task but fails to provide a clear overview or a logical summary of the main features. While you mention some percentages and trends, the information is presented in a fragmented way. You have not effectively compared the data between the two charts. For example, the description of the 2007-2016 trend is repetitive and lacks precision, using phrases like 'loan gain by people' repeatedly rather than describing the actual data points. To improve, ensure you identify the most significant trends and group data logically rather than listing figures in isolation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no introduction that paraphrases the prompt effectively, and the body paragraphs are not clearly demarcated. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as 'if we go towards' or 'if we see towards', which do not function as appropriate linking phrases. The progression of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the different age groups and the yearly trends. Better use of paragraphing and transition words like 'In contrast' or 'Furthermore' would improve the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use the phrase 'loan gain by people' or 'gaining loan', which is not natural English colocation for describing library statistics. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'take parts in' instead of 'participate in' or 'use the library'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends accurately (e.g., using 'gradually decrease' or 'increases' without specifying the extent or context). You should aim to use more precise terminology such as 'borrowed', 'circulation', 'fluctuated', or 'remained stable'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'these are the people who take loan and there are dividing into' and 'children fiction gains 38% loan which are higher value'. The sentence structure is often simplistic or awkward, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization (e.g., 'little Chalfont'). To reach a higher band, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct tense usage, and varying your sentence structures to include more complex clauses.
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