Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

These diagrams illustrate the ages of library members and loans taken by various categories in 2016 and total loans obtained from 2007 to 2016 in Little Chalfont library.

Overall, the largest group of library users contains adults from the age of 18 to 64 with a proportion of 51%. In contrast, young adults from 13 to 17 years contribute only 15% as the smallest one in 2016. Additionally, regarding book loans,most of the loans, accounting for about 38%, were taken by children's fiction and adult fiction by each while just 1% of debt acquired by children's DVDs. Additionally, the maximum number of loan around 22,000 is obtained in 2016. However, In 2007, only 16,000 debts was issued.

Furthermore, children with 22% utilized the library whereas the adults over 65 with 12%. Subsequently, adult audio books and young adults had same ratio of loans obtained with 2%. Whereas, adult non-fiction take 13% and children's non

In 2008 and 2009, 18,000 loans issued with same number while 2010 and 2012 contain same amount.In 2013, it reduced a bit.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all three charts provided, identifying key features such as the age distribution of members and the loan trends. However, the analysis is somewhat fragmented and lacks a cohesive overview of the data. While the main features are highlighted, the presentation of the loan trends over time is incomplete, as the response cuts off mid-sentence when discussing 'children's non'. Furthermore, the comparison between categories is occasionally confusing, such as the claim that 'adult audio books and young adults had same ratio'. The response would benefit from a more structured approach to grouping data to ensure all parts of the task are fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is hindered by abrupt transitions and incomplete sentences. While cohesive devices like 'In contrast', 'Additionally', and 'Furthermore' are used, they sometimes feel mechanical or are used to connect unrelated points. The paragraphing is inconsistent, and the final paragraph is particularly disjointed, failing to provide a clear summary of the trends. The lack of a concluding sentence or a fully developed final point makes the overall structure feel unfinished and difficult to follow in places.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision. There are several instances of awkward word choices, such as referring to library loans as 'debt' or 'debt acquired', which is inaccurate in this context. Other phrases like 'utilized the library' and 'same ratio of loans' are functional but repetitive. The vocabulary is generally sufficient to convey the basic meaning, but the misuse of terms like 'debt' significantly impacts the professional tone required for an Academic Task 1 report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'adult non-fiction take 13%'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'maximum number of loan around 22,000 is obtained'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods and commas. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors occasionally causes the reader to pause, which limits the score in this criterion.

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