Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart demonstrates the library in a city known as little Chalfont.There are four lists of age of library member in 2016.
First of all adults between 18-64 has a highest proportion almost doubled the remaining age group such as children, young adults 13-17, adults 65 and over.Moreover, second majority is children that contribute only 22 percent.The other two groups one of them is elderly individuals which has 15% overall.The least in number of people is younger adults whose age is between 13-17.
The below graph displays the year in the x-axis and total number of loans during the time period of 2007 to 2016 in the y-axis.The graph fluctuates from year to previous year as in 2016 it contribute to the majority number of loans nearly 22000 but the least number of loans in 2007 only 16000.Total loans by category is being listed in 2016 that children's fiction has 38%, children"s non-fiction is 6%, children"s DVDs contribute only 1%, young adults has 2%, adult fiction has 38%, adult non-fiction almost 13%, and adult audio books represent 2%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the charts, including the age distribution, the trend in loans over time, and the breakdown of loan categories. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview or synthesis of the data. While the key figures are mentioned, the comparison between categories could be more analytical rather than just listing percentages. For example, grouping the adult fiction and children's fiction as the dominant categories would have provided a stronger summary. The response addresses all parts of the prompt, but the development of the main trends is limited.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the different charts. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat basic and occasionally repetitive (e.g., 'The other two groups', 'The below graph'). The progression of ideas is logical, but the transitions between sentences could be smoother to improve the flow. Referencing is generally clear, though some sentences feel disjointed due to the lack of varied linking words. Overall, the structure is sufficient for the task but lacks the flexibility required for a higher band.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing the student to describe the data points and trends. There are some attempts at using specific terminology like 'proportion', 'fluctuates', and 'contribute'. However, there are instances of imprecise word choice, such as 'lists of age' instead of 'age groups' and 'majority number of loans' instead of 'highest number of loans'. Spelling errors, such as 'children"s' (using quotation marks instead of apostrophes), also detract from the overall quality. The range is sufficient to convey meaning but lacks sophistication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('adults between 18-64 has', 'children that contribute') and missing articles ('in x-axis', 'in y-axis'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of quotation marks instead of apostrophes. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the information, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall accuracy of the writing. A greater focus on proofreading for basic grammatical rules would be beneficial.
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