Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chart, table and the bar graph represents the information of total number of loans taken in different years by the people in a Little Chalfont library located in a town.

overall, the charts show that children took the loan higher than other categories while least loan was taken by the the people whom ages are above 65. The higher loan was taken in the year 2016 .

In 2016, above 20,000 people took the loan in which the higher ratio was of children which is 38% followed bycatogerie non-fiction children, children's DVDs, young adults and adult audio books whom percentages are less then 6. the moderate loan was taken by people whose ages are about 65 or above having percentage 13.

From 2007 to 2009 and in 2013, the loan was taken by people less than 15000. but the years from 2010 to onward till 2016 except 2013 ,the loan taken by the maximum people whom amount are above 20,000.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response provides a basic overview of the data, but it fails to effectively highlight the key features. While it mentions the highest and lowest categories, the description of the data is often inaccurate or confusing. For instance, the claim that 'children took the loan higher than other categories' is not clearly supported by the data provided in the table. Furthermore, the description of the trends over time is disjointed and lacks a clear, analytical focus. The response would benefit from a more systematic approach to grouping data and a more precise interpretation of the figures to ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which is a positive feature. However, the logical progression of ideas is weak. The transition between the overview and the specific details is abrupt, and the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'the loan was taken by'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the connection between the years and the specific data points. To improve, you should use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'loan', 'people', and 'taken'. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and word choice errors, such as 'catogerie' (spelling error) and 'whom ages are above 65'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision or sophistication. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more varied terminology related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', and ensure that your word choices are grammatically appropriate for the context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'graph represents', 'whom amount are'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence structures. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, these are often faulty, leading to confusion. For example, the sentence 'the loan taken by the maximum people whom amount are above 20,000' is grammatically incorrect and difficult to parse. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.

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