Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the chart illustrate the information about in a town public library called little Chalfont
Overall it can be seen that adult age maximised taken loan while other side children DVD's are lowest total loan .
with commence, 2007 around 15000 individuals taken loans while in 2016 maximum areound 20000 individuals are taken loan.
on the other hand children's fiction and adulty fiction almost same at 38% or other side adult audio is lowest
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While the student attempts to identify some main features, the analysis is superficial and lacks the necessary detail to provide a comprehensive summary. The data interpretation is incomplete, and the response does not effectively compare the information provided in the charts. Because the response is less than half the required length, it is impossible to develop the ideas sufficiently to reach a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks a clear structure. There is no logical progression of ideas, and the paragraphing is ineffective. Cohesive devices are almost entirely absent, making the text feel like a collection of disjointed sentences rather than a cohesive report. The use of linking phrases is minimal and often inaccurate, such as 'with commence, 2007', which does not function as a proper transition. To improve, the student should focus on using clear paragraph breaks for the introduction, overview, and body paragraphs, and employ a wider range of linking words to connect ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'taken loan' and 'maximum', which are used incorrectly in context. There are significant issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'maximised taken loan' and 'on the other side'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information accurately or with any degree of precision. To improve, the student needs to learn topic-specific vocabulary related to data description, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'proportion', and 'accounted for'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the chart illustrate'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Sentence structures are simple and often fragmented, lacking the complexity required for higher bands. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with errors in capitalization and spacing. The lack of control over basic sentence construction makes the text difficult to follow. The student should focus on mastering basic sentence patterns, including correct tense usage and subject-verb agreement, before attempting more complex structures.
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