Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

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The charts illustrates information of public library in the town known as little chalfont.

Overall, it can be seen that, in little chalfont library half of the members were Adults age between 18-64 by category, children's fiction and Adult fiction were more than any other lons. moreover, in 2016 the number of loans were bigger than other past years.

To begin with, there was member decribed by age group on it children 22% of the members were children, 15% were young adults between 13-17, 12% were Adults who was 65 or over whereas, the half of the members were Adults which was 18 to 64 years old.

Furthermore, there was also mentioned information of loans by category and total numbers of them, in category of loans, children's fiction and adult fiction were same and biggest than others by 38% moreover, non-fiction adults

were 13%. other category such as children's non-fiction, children's DVDs, young adults and adults audio book were under 6%. in addition in 2007 number of loans, in graph of

pts around 15,000 after one year in 2008 it increased by 18,000 and purchased to during 2009 to 2013, after 2013 it rose and in 2016 it reached to 22,000

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the charts, including the age distribution of members, the breakdown of loan categories, and the trend in total loans over time. You made relevant comparisons, such as noting that children's and adult fiction loans were equal. However, the report lacks precision in some areas; for example, the description of the loan trend is slightly confusing, and the data points for the years 2009-2013 are not clearly explained. To improve, ensure that all data points are accurately transcribed and that the overview clearly synthesizes the most significant trends rather than just listing details.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. You use some cohesive devices like 'To begin with', 'Furthermore', and 'In addition' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions. Some sentences are disjointed, and the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the phrase 'in graph of pts around 15,000'. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the basic information. You use some topic-specific terms like 'members', 'loans', and 'category'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and repetition, such as using 'biggest' instead of 'highest' or 'largest'. Additionally, there are minor errors in word formation and collocation, such as 'lons' (likely a typo for loans) and 'purchased to' which does not fit the context of the data. Expanding your range of descriptive verbs and adjectives would help you achieve a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The charts illustrates'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some run-on sentences and missing commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms.

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