Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given pie chart illustrates the proportion of age of members in library of little Chalfont. Whereas, the tabular representation depicts the total loans taken by numerous categories. while, the number of loans that were taken and all the data is showed according to 2016.
overall,in pie chart, the highest percentage was occcupied by the adults, for younger it was lowest. on the othe hand, majority of loans were take for pupils fiction.whether in 2016 the number of people that had taken loan was more as compared to previous years.
It can be clearly seen that in terms of pie chart, the percentage of young adults and individuals over 65 and above in library was 12% and 15% respectively. 22% of portion of pie chart was occupied by the childrens, Followed by the adults was 51%, which was highest among others. however, in 2016, 13% of loan was taken by the adult non-fiction. the percentage of adult and juveniles remained same, as it was 38% in both categories. the proportion of non- fiction adult accounted for 13%. frequently, 1% of loan was taken by childrens dvd and for audio books for elder was 2%.
Moving towards the rest of the information,as per the table chart, the loans started from above 15,000 in 2007, This figure increased to 20,000 in 2010 and stood at approximately 22,000 in 2011. Consequently, the number of loans in the year 2013 was less then 20,000, this figure hit a peak point in the year 2016 with 23,000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student successfully addresses all parts of the visual information by reporting the main features of the charts and attempting some comparisons. An overview is provided, noting that adults occupied the highest percentage in the pie chart and that fiction loans dominated the data. Key data points are selected and reported, such as the 51% for adults and the peak in 2016 at 23,000 loans. However, there are some mechanical reporting errors and minor inaccuracies in interpreting the data categories (e.g., confusing percentages and categories between adult fiction and adult non-fiction). Despite these flaws, the prompt is adequately covered, aligning well with a Band 6.0 level where all parts are addressed though some details are slightly unclear.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response features a coherent overall arrangement with a clear attempt to group information logically into an introduction, overview, body paragraphs, and a concluding data summary. However, paragraphing is somewhat fragmented and mechanical. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly in places, such as starting sentences with 'Whereas,' or 'while,' without proper dependent clauses, and faulty transitional phrases like 'frequently, 1% of loan was taken'. Referencing and logical progression are occasionally hindered by punctuation and capitalization errors throughout the text. These issues place the response firmly in the Band 5.5 to 6.0 range, warranting a 5.5 due to mechanical and inadequate cohesive devices.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms like 'proportion', 'tabular representation', 'approximately', and 'peak point'. However, there are frequent word choice and collocation errors, such as 'proportion of age', 'pupils fiction', 'childrens dvd', and 'audio books for elder'. Spelling and morphological issues also appear, such as 'occcupied' and missing apostrophes in plurals. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main message, the inaccuracies and repetitive phrasing prevent the score from reaching higher bands. This performance reflects the descriptors for Band 5.5, showing a limited but minimally adequate range with noticeable errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing structures like relative clauses and introductory prepositional phrases ('In terms of pie chart', 'Moving towards the rest of the information'). However, control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in verb tense consistency, subject-verb agreement, and capitalization (e.g., 'overall,in pie chart', 'number of people that had taken loan was more as compared', 'loans started from above 15,000... This figure increased'). Punctuation is often misused, separating clauses incorrectly with commas or failing to punctuate introductory elements properly. Because the errors are frequent and occasionally cause minor confusion, a Band 5.0 is appropriate.
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