Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie chart, & graph demonstrate the information

about Little Chalfant Library, from 2007 to 2016.

Overall, the pie chart represent the Adults age 18-24

occupy half of the population whereas, other

three ages take up the rest. The table responsible for

category wise taking loans of 2016. The lesser loan is

take by the children's DVDs while, the highest

loan is taken by the children Fiction and Adult Fiction.

The total number of loans in the graph increased

over the period, despite some fluctuation.

In 2016, library members at the age of 18-24 Adults

occupy more than 50% of population, whereas, 12%,

22% and 24% were obtained by Adults over 65,

Children and Young adults age of 13-15. In terms

of loan, fiction was the most popular category for

both children and adults. The total no. of fluctuation

increased considerably.

The total no. of loans both approximately 15,000

in 2007, then the no is increasing in 2008

or 2009 was 18,500. The figures reached about

20,500 in 2011, before falling slightly around

19,000 in 2013. Finally, loans increased again,

reaching almost 20,500 in 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response successfully covers all parts of the visual information provided by summarising the main features of the charts and making relevant comparisons. You identified the key demographic split in the pie chart, noting that adults aged 18-24 occupy half of the population. You also highlighted key trends in the table regarding library loans, such as the popularity of children and adult fiction, and outlined the overall upward trajectory in the line graph with its minor fluctuations. However, there are some inaccuracies in reporting specific figures, such as stating that loans were 'approximately 15,000 in 2007' when referencing data trends, and some descriptions are slightly vague. Nonetheless, all three visual components are addressed, fulfilling the requirements of an academic task 1 response adequately.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response displays a coherent overall arrangement, with a clear separation of paragraphs tackling different visual elements, such as the overview in the second paragraph, demographic details and loan categories in the third, and the line graph trend data in the final paragraph. Progression is generally logical, starting with an introduction, moving to an overview, and concluding with detailed data. However, cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or misused, as seen in awkward transitions like 'The table responsible for category wise taking loans of 2016.' Furthermore, referencing is occasionally unclear, and some sentences feel disjointed rather than flowing smoothly into one another. Paragraphing is present and helps structure the response, but paragraph boundaries could be used more purposefully to separate distinct graphical data sets.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, demonstrating an attempt to discuss statistical data and categories with terms such as 'proportion', 'fluctuation', 'category', and 'population'. However, there are notable word choice and collocation errors throughout the text, such as 'take up the rest', 'category wise taking loans', and 'the no. of fluctuation increased considerably' instead of referring to the number of loans increasing. Furthermore, spelling errors like 'Chalfant' instead of 'Chalfont' detract from lexical precision. While you successfully attempt less common vocabulary items, inaccurate phrasing and awkward collocations cause some minor confusion, placing this performance firmly in the band 5.5 to 6.0 range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The text contains a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating an ability to construct compound statements, as seen in sentences like 'In 2016, library members at the age of 18-24 Adults occupy more than 50% of population, whereas, 12%, 22% and 24% were obtained by Adults over 65...'. However, grammatical accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors regarding subject-verb agreement and tense consistency, such as 'The pie chart, & graph demonstrate', 'The lesser loan is take by', and 'then the no is increasing'. Punctuation is also erratic, with unnecessary commas separating subjects and verbs. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent the response from achieving a higher band score.

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