Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart and bar chart depict the number of library members according to their ages and the number of loans by these age groups between 2007 and 2016, respectively, while the table represents percentages of categories in which loans are taken.
Overall, adults of age between 18 and 64 were observed to be the highest in numbers; on the other hand, adults over 65 were seen less in numbers as library members. The bar charts represent the years 2015 and 2016, which were at the top in gaining loans around 20000 to 22000. Mostly, children's fiction and adult fiction were in the same categories in terms of percentage. While the Children's DVDs was at the lowest in percentage.
To commence with, members were seen of half of the total members of the library between the age groups of 18 and 64, gaining 51 numbers. Moreover, 15 members were seen in ages between 65 and above. Therefore, children observe fewer numbers. Young adults between 13 and 17 were little more than adults over 65.
The table gives the constant percentages of children's fiction and adult fiction in 2106. While young adults and adult audiobooks observed alike percentages of 12%. Children's nonfiction and adult nonfiction were at 6% and 13%, respectively. The chart observes the lowest trend of loans in 2007 of around 16000. Along with, from 2010 to 2012 were at the same numbers of 21000 approximately.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover all parts of the visual data, including the pie chart showing library members by age, the bar chart showing loans between 2007 and 2016, and the table outlining loan categories. However, the interpretation of the data is occasionally confused and imprecise. For instance, the writer states that members between 18 and 64 were 'gaining 51 numbers', misinterpreting percentages or numbers from the charts. Furthermore, there are chronological anomalies and factual inaccuracies in describing the data, such as referring to the year '2106'. While an overall trend is identified, the lack of accurate data reporting across all three charts prevents the response from achieving a higher band score, aligning it best with Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into four paragraphs, demonstrating an attempt at a logical structure with an introduction, overall summary, and body paragraphs. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed and confusing. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as starting paragraphs with 'To commence with' and using dangling transitional phrases like 'Along with, from 2010 to 2012 were at the same numbers'. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is frequently faulty, and referencing is unclear, leading to a mechanical and sometimes baffling flow. This performance corresponds to Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, with frequent awkward word choices and phrasing that impede clarity, such as 'gaining loans', 'children observe fewer numbers', and 'observed alike percentages'. There are also instances of incorrect terminology and collocation. While the writer attempts some topic-specific vocabulary related to charts and statistics, the lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for the task. Errors in word choice and expression are noticeable and cause some difficulty for the reader, placing this response firmly in Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'while the table represents percentages...' and 'adults of age between 18 and 64 were observed to be...'. However, grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors in preposition usage, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure (e.g., 'adults over 65 were seen less in numbers' and 'Children's DVDs was at the lowest'). These errors, combined with awkward phrasing, frequently disrupt readability, though communication is not entirely obscured. This profile matches the descriptors for Band 5.
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