Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The chart illustrate give information about a public library member and total loan category in little Chalfont.
Overall, Adults are considered maximum number of member. While adults and over people are minimum. Whereas, children's are average in membership.
In pie chart, age of library member are divided in the fourth part which are children, adults 18 to 64, Young adults 13 to 17 and last one Adults 65 and over. Mainly adults which are maximum number are accounted. Which is 51%. It is decline in Adults 65 and over reached to 12%. whereas, it had noted 22% in children. Whereas it is slightly above in young adults 13 to 17.
In 2016, table describe a total loan by categories in different area which are index children's fiction 38%, children's non-fiction 6%, children's DVDs 1%, young adults 2%, Adult fiction 38%, Adult non-fiction 13%, Adult audio book 2%. There are highest was 38% and lowest was 1%. In graph in 2007, slightly above 15000, in 2008 and 2009 was similar it had 19000. 2010 its slightly above to 20,000. After that its its dwell and rise. At the end of the year it was steady in 22000 in 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover all parts of the visual information, including the pie chart on library memberships and the table/graph on loan categories. However, the reporting of main features is often confusing and lacks clarity. For instance, the student writes 'Adults are considered maximum number of member. While adults and over people are minimum,' which contains contradictory phrasing. While data points like 51% for adults and 12% for seniors are mentioned, the overall comparison and reporting of the data from the different charts are poorly integrated and lack a clear, fully developed overview. This corresponds to a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The text is broken into short, disjointed paragraphs that fail to establish a clear logical progression. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively, such as the repeated use of 'Whereas' and 'Which' to start sentences incorrectly (e.g., 'Mainly adults which are maximum number are accounted. Which is 51%'). Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information between the pie chart, table, and graph. Paragraphing is attempted but remains inadequate to guide the reader smoothly through the various datasets, placing the response firmly in Band 4.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The lexical range is limited and frequently inaccurate. The student relies on basic vocabulary and struggles with word forms and collocations, as seen in expressions like 'total loan category', 'age of library member are divided in the fourth part', and 'its dwell and rise'. There are also frequent spelling and morphological issues, such as 'children's' being misused or pluralised incorrectly. While the basic topic of library loans and memberships is conveyed, vocabulary errors cause strain for the reader and prevent the response from achieving a higher band, fitting Band 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There is a very limited range of structures, and attempts at complex sentences frequently result in major errors, sentence fragments, or ungrammatical clauses, such as 'The chart illustrate give information' and 'In 2016, table describe a total loan by categories in different area which are index children's fiction...'. Subject-verb agreement errors ('The chart illustrate', 'age ... are') and tense inconsistencies are pervasive. Due to the high frequency of errors that cause difficulty for the reader, this merits a Band 4.0.
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