Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given pie chart, table chart and line graph illustrates the information about a public library in a town known as Little Chalfont. The given period of library in 2007 to 2016.

To commence with, it is npticeable that first of all in the pie chart the children was used the library at 22 and young adults 13-17 under age at 15 children used the library. However, adults 18-64 and adults 65 and over was used the library at 12 and 51. On the contrary, in the table chart total loans in 2016 children fiction and adult fiction at 38% more highst and children non-fiction and adult non-fiction 6% to 13% loans provide and very low loans in childrens DVDs at 1%. On the otehr hand, in the line grapg total number of loans in 2007 to 2012 at 16,000 to 22,000 and after that 2013 to 2016 at 19,000 to 23,000 up and down.

Overall, it becomes apparent that in the pie chart adult children more than used library and in table chart children fiction and adult fiction was more increase provide the loans.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to cover all parts of the visual data by mentioning the pie chart, table, and line graph. However, the selection of main features is basic and lacks precise comparisons across the charts. For instance, the statistics quoted from the pie chart and table contain significant inaccuracies and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'adults 65 and over was used the library at 51'). While an overview is attempted in the final paragraph, it is extremely brief and slightly unclear. Consequently, the response aligns best with Band 5, as the data is presented only partially and lacks clear development or precise synthesis.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into four brief paragraphs, providing a basic structure. However, the logical progression is weak, and the overall flow is hindered by awkward transitions such as 'To commence with, it is npticeable that first of all'. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical or repetitive manner, and referencing within sentences is often unclear (e.g., 'the children was used the library at 22'). Paragraphing is present, but the body paragraph crams multiple disparate graphs together without clear separation. This performance reflects Band 5 criteria, where organization is visible but overall progression and cohesion are inadequate.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'library', 'children', 'adults', and 'loans'. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'npticeable' instead of noticeable, 'grapg' instead of graph, and 'otehr' instead of other. Phrasing such as 'more highst' and 'more increase provide the loans' demonstrates a lack of control over word formation and collocation. These frequent lexical limitations and errors place the writing firmly in Band 4, as vocabulary is basic and sometimes strains the reader's comprehension.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent attempts at longer clauses that become ungrammatical. There are persistent errors in subject-verb agreement and tense usage, such as 'the children was used the library', 'adults 18-64... was used', and 'loans provide'. Punctuation is basic, and sentence boundaries are sometimes obscured by awkward clauses. Because simple structures contain frequent errors and attempts at complexity result in faulty formations, this corresponds to a Band 4 level of grammatical control.

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