Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

These charts illustrate the information about the public library in town called Little Chalfont. As you can see in pie chart there was a 22 children, 15 young adults, 51 adults and 12 adults which were over the age of 65. Total loans percentage in category of Children's and Adult fiction remained the same which were 38%.

Most of the children and and adults loans percentage were in-between 1% to 6%. In the bar chart lowest loan was about 16,000 in 2007 and highest one was about 23,000 in 20116. From the year of 2008 to 2011 loans was in-between to 19,000 to 22,000. This amount was fell down to the 21,000 in 2012 and then agian dropped to the 19,000 in 2013 and then again slightly increased to the above 20,000 in 2014 and 2015.

Children's DVDs has just 1% loans. The loans amount was fluctuated from the 2007 to 2016.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to summarize the provided charts detailing a public library in Little Chalfont, but it struggles significantly with accurate data interpretation and reporting. For instance, the student states there were '22 children, 15 young adults, 51 adults and 12 adults which were over the age of 65' from the charts, which misreads percentages as raw numbers or miscalculates proportions. Furthermore, years are misreported, such as '20116' instead of 2016. While the main features like the categories and loan trends are touched upon, the lack of accurate data extraction and inappropriate referencing prevent the response from achieving a higher band. Ideas are presented but remain underdeveloped due to inaccuracies.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into three paragraphs, providing a basic structure for an overview and details. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward sequencing and unclear referencing. Phrases like 'As you can see in pie chart' and repetitive transitional words ('and then again') create a mechanical and disjointed flow. Cohesive devices are used inadequately or inaccurately, and pronoun referencing is often confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the exact relationships between the data points. Paragraphing is present, but the internal organization lacks coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily constrained by the subject matter. The student relies on simple terms like 'loans', 'amount', 'highest', and 'lowest'. There are noticeable errors in word choice and phrasing, such as 'This amount was fell down' and 'Children's DVDs has just 1% loans', which reflect a limited grasp of collocations and appropriate academic terminology. Less common lexical items are largely absent, and repetitive errors in basic vocabulary choice occasionally strain the reader's understanding.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammatical range is quite limited, consisting mostly of simple and straightforward sentence structures, alongside poorly formulated complex attempts. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies and structural faults, such as 'loans was in-between to 19,000 to 22,000' and 'There were a 22 children'. Subject-verb agreement is frequently violated (e.g., 'amount was fell down'), and punctuation is occasionally mishandled. These frequent errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from reaching a higher band.

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