Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given pie chart and bar graph illustrates the information of a public library users among different ages and shows number of loans of library between 2007 to 2016.
Overall, members of library devided into four age cataopries, in which adults were ,most users of library. However, total number of loans shows the data in ratio between ten years.
To begin with, Adults 18-64 age catagory were most users of library, which was 51%. Young adults 13-17 however has 15% fraction of library members. The lowest ratio of library users were adults 65 and over, with only 12% proportion. 22% member were children of library.
Turning to the graph, the bar graph demonstrates number of loans of library. From 2007 graph inclined gradually till 2016 except 2013. For children fiction and adult fiction the loan were 38% in 2016. 13% loan library ,took for adult non-fiction users at the end of the year. Young adults and adults audio books, ratio were 2% of loan. However, only 1% proportion has children's DVDs. After all comparisons in 2007 the number of loan were upto 15,000 and the graph raised at the end of the year, which was upto 20,000, except, 2013 because in that year the number of the graph were slowly down of 20,000,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover all parts of the visual data, including the age distribution of library members, the total number of loans from 2007 to 2016, and the breakdown of loans by category in 2016. An overview is attempted in the second paragraph, mentioning the four age categories and adults as the most frequent users. However, the selection of data is somewhat haphazard and contains several inaccuracies or confusing statements. For instance, the reference to 'children fiction and adult fiction the loan were 38% in 2016' is slightly unclear regarding categories, and the description of the bar graph mixes up values and trends across years (e.g., stating loans went up to 15,000 in 2007 when the start was around 15,700). While the main features are touched upon, the lack of precision and somewhat disjointed presentation place this in Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into four paragraphs, showing a basic structure with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs dealing with the different charts. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To begin with', 'Turning to the graph', and 'However', but they are sometimes mechanical or awkwardly placed. Logical progression is occasionally disrupted by confusing referencing and abrupt shifts between the membership statistics, category percentages, and the timeline graph within the same paragraph. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion requires improvement to ensure smoother transitions between ideas. This performance aligns with the Band 5 descriptors for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary appropriate for Task 1, relying heavily on basic or repetitive terms such as 'users', 'number', 'loans', and 'graph'. There are numerous spelling and word-formation errors, including 'devided', 'cataopries', 'catagory', and 'ratio' (used where proportions or percentages are meant). Some expressions are unnatural or unidiomatic, such as 'loan library ,took for adult non-fiction users' and 'the number of the graph were slowly down'. While the core message is generally understandable, these frequent lexical errors and limited control over less common vocabulary constrain the score to Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'the bar graph illustrates... and shows', 'members of library devided', 'Adults 18-64 age catagory were most users', 'the number of loan were upto 15,000'). Punctuation is also flawed, with erratic comma placement and spacing. Complex sentences often contain errors that cause some difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 5 descriptor where frequent grammatical errors persist.
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