Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart illustrates the proportions of library member's age and toatal loans taken by little Chalfont library in 2016. Overall, majorly loans taken for children's fiction and adult fiction by library. Moreover, least loan taken for children's DVDs.
To begin with, age of 18-64 years people covers 51% membership in little chalfont library which covers most in category. However, loans taken for this group's category are divided in adult fiction with 38%, adult non-fiction with 13% and only 2% for adult audio books, which covers total 53%. Furthermore, only 2% loan taken for age group of 13-17 years for young aults content. In addition, they covers 15% portion in the membership.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The response only partially addresses the task. First, the length requirement of at least 150 words is not met, as the student's text contains only 112 words, which directly impacts the task achievement score. Second, the student misinterprets the visual data by referring to multiple charts as a single 'pie chart', whereas the source contains multiple distinct figures including a bar chart, a table, and demographic breakdowns. While the student attempts to report some main features, such as the membership proportions and popular book genres, the overview is weak, and the details are incomplete, omitting key trends visible in the line chart over time. To improve, the student must ensure all components of the visual data are correctly identified and described fully.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text shows some basic organisation, utilizing transitional phrases such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'Furthermore' to link ideas. However, the overall progression is disjointed, and the paragraphing is underdeveloped, with abrupt shifts between ideas and data points. Cohesive devices are at times repetitive and mechanical. For instance, phrases like 'loans taken for' are overused awkwardly across sentences. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'In addition, they covers 15% portion', where the pronoun antecedent is ambiguous. Overall arrangement meets the lower-bound criteria for coherence, but smoother transitions and clearer paragraph structures are needed for a higher score.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The lexical resource is limited and displays frequent errors in word choice and collocation. Examples include 'library member's age' instead of 'the ages of library members', 'majorly loans taken' instead of 'the majority of loans', and 'young aults content'. Vocabulary is largely repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'loans', 'taken', and 'category'. Although the student attempts some less common terms like 'membership' and 'fiction', inaccuracies in spelling ('aults') and collocation impede natural expression. A wider range of precise vocabulary and greater attention to word formation are necessary to elevate this criterion.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent errors in basic grammar and subject-verb agreement. Notable errors include 'library member's age and toatal loans taken', 'least loan taken', 'age of 18-64 years people covers', 'they covers 15% portion', and missing articles throughout the text (e.g., 'in little chalfont library'). Complex structures are rarely attempted, and when simple constructions are used, grammatical inaccuracies remain frequent. Punctuation is generally basic. The density of errors causes noticeable difficulty for the reader and prevents the writing from reaching a higher band.
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