Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
This illustion give information about the public reading room in city who name is Chalfont.
It is quite evident from the pie chart about the library member of different ages. The population of the Children in library is 22 percent and the majority of the members was a Adults between the age of 18 to 64 who population was 51 percent and 15 percent was Young adults between the age of 13 to 17 and 12 percent was Aults who age wa 65 and over then 65. Furthermore, table gives information about the loans category. Firstly, 38% loan gave to Children's fiction, 6% for Children's non-fiction,1$ foe Children's DVDs, 38 percent again for Adult fiction, 13% for Adult non-fiction and 2% for Adult audio books.
However, the bar chart give information about the total number of loans during 2007 to 2016. In the year of 2007, almost 15060 people gave loan and this population significantily icreased until the year of 2011 and the population in this year was more than 20000 or less than 25000. After this the population was decreased for two year in 2013 the citizen who takes the loan was almost 19999.During the year of 2014 to 2016 the population was also grow and reached around 22222.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the three visual elements provided, noting the age distribution of library members, loan categories, and the 10-year trend in total loans. However, there are notable inaccuracies in reporting the data. For example, the student states that the population of children was 22 percent (whereas the chart shows 22 members out of total members, not a percentage) and misreads figures from the bar chart, claiming loans reached '22222' or that people 'gave loan'. While an overview of sorts is provided through descriptive details, the lack of precision and confusing phrasing (treating member counts as percentages or populations) prevents the response from achieving a higher band. It partially addresses all parts of the task, meeting the criteria for Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is organized into paragraphs corresponding roughly to the different charts provided. However, the logical progression is hindered by repetitive phrasing and weak cohesive ties (such as repetitive use of 'the population' to refer to library members, loan items, and even citizens). Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is frequently mechanical or faulty, as seen in awkward transitions like 'then 65' and 'Furthermore, table gives information'. Referencing is not always clear, and the overall arrangement feels disjointed. This aligns with the descriptors for Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very limited and often inappropriate for an academic task report. The student relies heavily on basic, repetitive terms and makes noticeable word-choice errors, such as 'illustion' instead of 'illustration', 'city who name is' instead of 'town called', and stating that people 'gave loan' or 'takes the loan' instead of borrowing items. Less common vocabulary is attempted with high inaccuracy, and spelling mistakes ('significantily', 'icreased') further impede clarity. This vocabulary profile corresponds to a Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response shows a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple or clumsily joined compound sentences. There are frequent, heavy grammatical errors throughout, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the majority of the members was a Adults'), incorrect prepositions ('population of the Children in library'), and erroneous tense usage. Complex sentence attempts are consistently faulty and often obscure the meaning of the data being reported. Frequent errors cause strain and difficulty for the reader, placing this response firmly in Band 4.
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