Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The charts provides the information about a public library in a town Chalfont.

Overall it can be seen that, little chalfont Library which was distruibuted different age of library member in the 2016.

At the initial stage, in the clafornt library majority of the highest 51% of the Adults which over 65 year of ages . However, the 15% of the Young adults between 13 to 17 year were coming. Following this, the lowest 12% of the Young adults between the year 13 to 17. after that, the children and Adults fiction which had taken the approximate 38% of Total loans by different category in the year 2016.

on the other hand, the bar graph consisted the total number loans which Residents have taken in 2007 to 2016. Furthermore, the biggest loans in 2016 which numerous had taken 22,000 money. Consequently, in 2007, many people they don't taken loans hence it was only 15,500 which was very less compared to all the given period of year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to cover the multiple charts regarding Little Chalfont Library, but the information is presented in a very confused and inaccurate manner. For instance, the student states that '51% of the Adults which over 65 year of ages', whereas the chart clearly shows that adults aged 18-64 accounted for 51%, and those aged 65 and over accounted for 12%. Similarly, data regarding loan categories and total numbers of loans are misread and poorly reported, such as claiming that people 'taken 22,000 money'. While the student identifies some features of the visual data, the severe misinterpretation of figures and lack of a coherent, well-structured overview restrict the task achievement to a lower band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks clear overall progression and logical organisation. The writing is broken down into disjointed single-sentence paragraphs that fail to group related ideas effectively. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'At the initial stage', 'Following this', and 'after that', which do not fit the nature of static demographic data and loan breakdowns. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended comparisons and transitions between the age breakdown, loan categories, and the historical trend graph.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and limited, featuring frequent errors in word choice, form, and collocation. Examples include 'distruibuted', 'clafornt', 'numerous had taken 22,000 money', and 'they don't taken loans'. The student struggles to report data accurately using appropriate statistical terms, relying instead on repetitive and imprecise language. Spelling errors are noticeable throughout the text, and these lexical inadequacies occasionally impede clear communication of the visual data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The range of sentence structures is very limited, and attempts at complex or relative clauses are almost entirely faulty, such as 'library which was distruibuted different age of library member' and 'the bar graph consisted the total number loans which Residents have taken'. There are frequent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions (e.g., 'in 2007 to 2016', 'year of ages'). These errors are pervasive and frequently cause difficulty for the reader.

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