Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided pie chart delineates the information about public library in a town known as Little Chalfont accompanying by a bar graph which illustrates the total number of loans from [redacted phone].
A comprehensive overview of the pie chart reveals that Adults 18-64 constituted the predominent segment at 51%. Whereas, the lowest propotion was of adults 65 and over at 12%, closely followed by young adults at 15%.
Further analysis of the bar chart illustrates that highest value at 22,000 in 2016. In 2007, the lowest value was recorded at 16,000. For instense, in some years the number of loans were almost the same at around 20,000. From year 2014 onwards the value was subsequently increased. Turning back to the pie chart the segment of children was recorded at 22%. Maxmimum loan was for fiction books which was 38% for Children's fiction and 38% for Adult fiction.
In contrast, number of loan in both 2008 and 2009 were the same at 18,000.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student attempts to address all parts of the task by reporting information from the pie charts and the bar graph, including age demographics, loan categories, and overall trends over time. However, there are several factual inaccuracies and misreadings of the data. For instance, the student states that the lowest value in 2007 was 16,000, whereas the chart shows approximately 15,700, and refers to a value of 22,000 in 2016 which actually appears closer to 21,700. Additionally, the description jumps somewhat disjointedly between the different visual elements, notably returning to the pie chart mid-way through the text after discussing the bar graph. Furthermore, some key comparisons are missing or underdeveloped. These shortcomings place the response at band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response demonstrates some organisation through transitional phrases such as "A comprehensive overview of" and "Further analysis of". However, the overall progression is disrupted by the erratic flow of information, such as abruptly turning back to the pie chart after having already moved on to the bar graph, which compromises logical development. Paragraphing is also poorly managed; the text consists of a series of short, choppy sentences and paragraphs that do not group related ideas cohesively. Cohesive devices are occasionally used mechanically or inaccurately, such as "Whereas, the lowest propotion was", which fragments the sentence structure. Overall, the arrangement lacks smooth transitions between the distinct charts provided in the prompt.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully incorporating terms related to graphical data such as "delineates", "constituted", "proportion", and "segment". However, there are noticeable spelling errors, such as "predominent" (predominant) and "propotion" (proportion), as well as lexical inaccuracies like "For instense" and "Maxmimum". Word choices are sometimes awkward or unnatural, such as "number of loan in both 2008 and 2009 were the same". While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic data points, the frequent errors in spelling and word form prevent the response from achieving a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, utilising relative clauses and introductory prepositional phrases (e.g., "From year 2014 onwards the value was subsequently increased"). However, control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as missing articles ("delineates the information about public library"), subject-verb agreement issues ("the number of loans were almost the same"), and awkward passive voice constructions ("the value was subsequently increased"). Punctuation errors are also present, such as fragmenting sentences with inappropriate full stops or commas. These errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader.
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