Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
These charts illustrates the information of public library, named as "Little Chalfont Library". Which includes various data from year 227 to 2016.
Overall, Pie chart represents age of library members, such as children, young, adults or over 65. Another data is depicts by table, it includes total loans by category as per year 2016. Moving further, bar graph shows total numbers of loans taken by library members over the years 2007 - 2016.
Pie chart is mainly classified in 4 parts, where more than half shares are occupied by adults between the age 18 -24.This share holds the highest percentage by 51. Remained 22% is occupied by chi
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is severely incomplete, cutting off mid-sentence at only 108 words, which falls well short of the 150-word minimum requirement. Because of this under-length penalty, the content cannot be fully developed. However, the student does make an initial attempt to introduce the three visual components (a pie chart, a table, and a bar chart) and reports a couple of data points, such as the 51% figure for adult library members. To achieve a higher band score, the response must cover all visual elements thoroughly, provide meaningful comparisons between categories and trends over time, and meet the word count requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The text demonstrates a basic attempt to structure the writing, using introductory sentences and breaking information down by chart type. However, cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. For instance, sentences like 'Which includes various data from year 227 to 2016' are ungrammatically fragmented from the preceding sentence. The paragraphing is disjointed, and the response cuts off abruptly before a proper overview or conclusion can be established. Logical progression is heavily disrupted by these structural and length limitations.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive (e.g., 'charts illustrates', 'total numbers of loans'). There are also notable lexical inaccuracies and typos, such as 'year 227' instead of 2007, and 'chi' cutting off the word 'children'. While the writer attempts some topic-specific terms like 'library members' and 'loans by category', the range is limited and inadequate for a fully realized Task 1 response, resulting in a band 5.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
Grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors that impede communication. Examples include subject-verb agreement errors ('charts illustrates') and major sentence boundary errors, such as starting a sentence with a relative pronoun ('Which includes various data...'). The range of grammatical structures is very limited, relying heavily on simple clauses and faulty attempts at complex ones. Punctuation is also problematic throughout the short text.
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