Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

 

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart and a chart illustrates about the information of little chalfont library in a town and loans. All ages residents visit the library including children, adults and old men. By contrast, number of loans also distribute to the youngsters and elders.

The pie chart commences with the percentages of members in library. In which kids is of 22% . The youngers are about 12%. Mostly the mature guys visit it and reaches around 51%z information age people are of 15% in it. The category of debt from 2007 to 2016, the children fiction is about 38% while for non fiction only 6%. For children DVDs only 1% . The young adult s is of 2%. The adult fiction consists of 38% while non fiction is of 13%

For the adult audio books it’s of 2%. In 2007, the loan is of 15k while in 2008 it slightly increased to about 18k. In 2009 it remain same while in [redacted phone] it moved up to 20k. Then in [redacted phone] it slightly increased more than 20k.

In conclusion, the pie chart information about the library is invaluable for the people mindset growth.

Because Books can educate the every age person.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The student attempts to summarize the provided charts and table about Little Chalfont Library, mentioning age demographics, loan categories, and trends over time. However, there are numerous inaccuracies and misreadings of the data. For instance, the student states 'The youngers are about 12%' when the chart shows 15% for young adults aged 13-17, and misinterprets the table categories, confusing loan percentages with membership or debt. The overview is weak, and key features are poorly highlighted. While the response touches on all parts of the visual information, the data reporting is unreliable and lacks precision, which keeps the score at Band 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The text is organized into brief paragraphs, but the logical progression and overall flow are disrupted by disjointed sentences and weak cohesive devices. Phrases such as 'By contrast, number of loans also distribute' and 'The category of debt from 2007 to 2016' fail to establish clear relationships between the ideas. Referencing and substitution are frequently faulty, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended comparisons. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs is mechanical and often confusing, warranting a Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and frequently inappropriate for an academic task. Examples of unnatural word choices and collocation errors include 'old men' instead of 'elderly patrons', 'mature guys', and 'category of debt' instead of 'loan categories' or 'borrowings'. Spelling and word-form errors also appear, such as 'younger s'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey a basic meaning, the frequent errors and lack of precision restrict the score to Band 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The pie chart and a chart illustrates', 'the children fiction is'), prepositions ('in library'), and tense usage ('the loan is of 15k'). Punctuation errors, such as missing spaces before capital letters and random stray characters like '51%z', further detract from the quality. These frequent grammatical errors often cause difficulty for the reader, aligning with Band 4.5.

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