Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given charts illustrate the data of public library in a town called little chalfont .
Overall , it can be seen that the children's fiction remained the largest loans in 2016 .In term of members , adults 18-64 accounted the biggest proportion in 2016 . However , total number of loans fluctuated all over the years .
Regarding members , adults had the highest around 51 . While children were 22 . Also young adults 13-17 and adults 65 and over were recorded 15 and 12. Children's fiction loans had the highest proportion 38 % , while 1% by children's DVDs . Also 38% loans for adult fiction in 2016 .
By contrast , highest loans given y 2016 around 22,000 . while 16,000 was lowest number of loans by 2007 . Second highest recorded by 2011 about 21,000 . Also the number was fluctuated in all years 2008 to 2015
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover all parts of the visual data by mentioning library members, loan categories, and the trend over time. However, there are significant inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, the student states that 'adults 18-64 accounted the biggest proportion in 2016' (members) and later mentions 'highest loans given y 2016 around 22,000'. The overview is brief and somewhat fragmented. While some main features are outlined, the lack of precision and underdeveloped comparisons prevent the response from achieving a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is divided into short paragraphs, attempting to group information logically (overview, members and categories, and trends over time). However, progression is weak, and the organization feels disjointed due to abrupt shifts between sentences. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively (e.g., 'Also', 'While', 'By contrast'). Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as starting a sentence with 'While children were 22', which lacks a proper subject or grammatical link to the previous idea. Paragraphing is present, but overall cohesion is mechanical.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'highest', 'proportion', 'loans', and 'members'. There are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'children's fiction remained the largest loans' and 'highest loans given y 2016'. Furthermore, basic spelling and capitalization errors are present throughout the text (e.g., 'little chalfont', 'In term of', 'fluctuated all over the years'). The lexical range is minimally adequate for the task, but frequent inaccuracies limit the score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures. Most sentences are simple or poorly constructed attempts at complex forms that lack necessary verbs or prepositions (e.g., 'adults 18-64 accounted the biggest proportion'). Grammatical errors are frequent throughout the text, including missing articles, incorrect prepositions ('in 2007' vs 'by 2007'), and passive voice errors ('highest loans given y 2016'). Punctuation is also problematic, with incorrect spacing around commas and periods. These errors frequently cause strain for the reader.
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