Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The pie chart shows the proportion of age of library members in 2016 while table data shows the category of loans in same year. Furthermore, The bar chart compares the data of total number ofloans between 2007 to 2016.
Overall, the maximum contribution in pie chart is of adults which shows the library members by age. While the highest loan is taken by children's fiction and adult fiction, most least by children's DVDs. Additionaly, the peak loan is consumed in 2016 initially which was very less in number.
In 2016, the 51% of adults are the member of library, highest in number. While 22% contribution is of children and 15% by young adults of age between 13 to 17. Moreover, the adults over 65 years have the proportion of 12%, most least. Over the same period, children's fiction and adults had the 38% of loans in category. while adult non fiction recorded figure was 13% and 6% of children's non fiction the most leat loan taken for children's DVDs almost 2%, same number for young adult and audio book.
Loans number initially was on 16,000 in 2007 which rose to 18,000 in 2008/2009. Increased to 21,000 in 2010 and remain same in 2011, decreased to 20,500 in 2012 and 19000 in 2013, peaked at 22000 in 2016.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the visual data by mentioning the pie chart, table, and bar chart. Key features and comparisons are highlighted, such as the highest demographic of library members (adults aged 18-64 at 51%) and the distribution of loans by category (fiction categories leading). However, there are some inaccuracies and vague expressions when reporting data, such as 'peak loan is consumed in 2016 initially which was very less in number' and some slight misreadings of specific figures from the bar chart. Furthermore, the selection of data points could be structured more cohesively to present a clearer overview of trends over the decade. Therefore, it satisfies the requirements for Band 6.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into distinct paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing specific data. However, the progression within paragraphs is sometimes disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is mechanical or awkward, as seen in phrases like 'Furthermore, The bar chart' and 'Additionaly, the peak loan'. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and logical links between sentences need strengthening to ensure smoother readability throughout the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary for the task, successfully using terms like 'proportion', 'category', 'contribution', and 'demographic concepts'. However, there are several lexical errors, inappropriate word choices, and awkward phrasing, such as 'most least', 'most leat loan', and 'audio book' instead of plural forms. Repetition of words like 'loan' and 'fiction' also occurs. These inaccuracies do not entirely impede communication but prevent the response from achieving a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response includes a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent. There are several grammatical errors and awkward structures, such as 'the proportion of age of library members', 'table data shows', and 'Loans number initially was on 16,000'. Articles are frequently missing or misused (e.g., 'while adult non fiction recorded figure was 13%'). While these errors do not completely obscure the meaning, they occur frequently enough to lower the overall grammatical score.
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