Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below give information about a public library in a town called Little Chalfont.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The chart illustrates the information about the library in chalfont town while in contrast they gives information about the total number of loans.
Overall, In library members which are involved the children, young adults(13-17), adults(18-64), adults 65 and over. Whille in contrast the list of loan which are added by different categories of people and also distincit proportion in 2016.Hence, total number of loans is [redacted phone].
First of all, in library members the amount of childrens are 22, while the young adults 13-17 are tge 15 members. Else, other side the adults 18-64 are higher amount in all of them which is 51 peoples.While in contras the adults 65 and over is the lower amount than the other library members which is the amount of only 12 peoples.
On other hand, the category of total loans by 2016, in which children's fiction are higher proportion than others which is 38%. While, in contrast the children's non-fiction proportion is 6%.
The proportion of children's Dvds is 1% which is the small percentage than all of them. However, the young adults proportion is 2% and adult fiction is 38% while the adult non-fiction is 1% and adult audio books is 2%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The student attempts to address the visual data by mentioning the age groups of library members, the total loans by category in 2016, and the overall loan numbers. However, the response lacks a clear, cohesive overview of the main trends. Furthermore, the student completely omits reporting any actual figures or trends from the line graph showing the total number of loans from 2007 to 2016, stating only that 'total number of loans is 2007-2016' without providing the data points. Several figures are also misreported or confused, such as stating 'adult non-fiction is 1%' when the chart shows 13%, and mentioning 'adult audio books is 2%' correctly but omitting the line graph analysis entirely. Due to these significant omissions and inaccuracies in reporting the main features, the task is only partially addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response is divided into paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, the logical progression is weak and confused. Transitional phrases like 'while in contrast' and 'First of all' are misused repeatedly and mechanically, often appearing in inappropriate contexts (e.g., 'while in contrast the list of loan...'). Referencing is frequently unclear, and sentences often feel disjointed rather than forming a flowing argument. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is severely disrupted by repetitive phrasing and awkward structuring, resulting in a confusing overall arrangement.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student repeatedly relies on basic words and phrases such as 'amount', 'proportion', 'higher amount', and 'lower amount'. There are numerous unnatural collocations and word choice errors, such as calling the number of members an 'amount' ('the amount of childrens are 22', 'higher amount in all of them which is 51 peoples') instead of 'number' or 'figure'. Spelling and word formation errors are also present, such as 'distincit' and 'tge'. The range of vocabulary is inadequate for conveying precise statistical information.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences contain significant errors in basic grammar, subject-verb agreement, and preposition use. Examples include 'The chart illustrates the information about the library in chalfont town while in contrast they gives information', 'in library members which are involved', and 'adults 18-64 are higher amount in all of them which is 51 peoples'. Punctuation is erratic, and sentence boundaries are sometimes blurred. Errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader in interpreting the intended meaning.
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